Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.

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Issues:

1. About 80% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. About 40% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

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Score: 69

Issues:

1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words. 

Honesty is one of the most precious virtues of human beings. Someone takes it for granted that always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. But I disagree with this statement.[Use your own language to rewrite it.  ]

Sometimes people tell lies for protecting other people. Revealing [Since revealing  ]the truth can be very cruel to someone. In this case, telling a lie to him/her is a better choice. Because this lie [ This measure ]will keep him/her[unclear pronoun  ] from (hurting by some brutal truth)[grammatical error  ] and (eventually this lie will improve the relationship between each other)[weak logical connection from the prior part of the sentence  ]. (We call this lie people tell out of kindness)[unclear/shift of person  ] as “white lie”. For example, one day your[ shift of person ] beloved friend asks you if[whether  ] she has gotten a bit slimmer recently. You know recently she has tried very hard[ recently ] to reduce her weight (and went)[ unparallel ] back and forth between her dormitory and gym every day, but you still couldn’t[ unparallel ] see any changes on her figure. At that moment, you tend to tell her a white lie rather than tell her the brutal truth directly. You will say,” Oh, darling, it makes a difference and you look prettier now!” Your kind lie cheers her up and encourages her to keep working. [ lack logical connection from the prior sentence ]Also, your relationship is consolidated.  [Very wordy paragraph; you should trim 50% of it.  ]

Second, it is unavoidable for people to tell some lies. That is because liying[ spelling error ] is the mechanism which[/that  ] helps us to protect ourselves and better survive[factual inconsistency  ], [ punctuation error ]rejecting such natural mechanism completely is unrealistic. For instance, in some social situations, it’s[informal  ] impossible for everyone to show his happiness and open his mind (to us heartly and honestly)[ redundant/unclear ]. Sometimes we have difficulty judging whether this guy is trustworthy, so at this time we tell lies for the purpose of protecting ourselves[ logical incompleteness ]. If we always tell [  grammatical error]sincere words from our deepest heart [ redundant ]to every person and neglect to do some prevention, we’re[ grammatical error ] easily be used by [ [passive ]some bad guys.

Taking into consideration all of the factors discussed above, sometimes it’s[ logical confusing/it-taking ] a wise choice for us not to tell the truth for protecting other people and ourselves.