Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation

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  • sunshine
    University: zhejiang university of technology
    Nationality: China
    November 27, 2020 at 5:05 am

    Convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

    Convenience foods are accepted by a growing number of people, especially those who want to save time for their daily work. It is believed by some that convenience foods tend to be more popular and finally replace traditional foods. From their perspective, the pace of modern life forces citizens to spend much less time in food preparation. With the convenience of frozen food, it is possible that it will be more preferable. Furthermore, the price of convenience foods has dropped considerably because of rapid development of technology, which means less people cannot afford it. Eventually, human may change to convenience food completely.

    As for me, although the sales of convenience food is expected to increase, it is of little possibility that traditional foods can be totally replaced. To begin with, it is known that traditional foods are much healthier than fast foods, with more nutrition and better taste as well. There is an increasing popularity for healthy life style at present, so people is projected to pay more attention to healthy eating. Moreover, traditional foods are an important part of local culture, such as dumplings in China and roast beef and potatoes in England. That is to say, to protect and promote their culture, people in one area will still prepare local foods and teach the preparation methods to their offspring. Thus, traditional foods can maintain its existence in the future.

    In a word, people may chose convenience foods more frequently, but traditional foods are unlikely to disappear for their healthy property and as a symbol of local culture.

    December 5, 2020 at 4:32 pm

    Score: ungraded

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