Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans.

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    University: Jiangxi University
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    February 21, 2020 at 3:35 am

    Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Others, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent than humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

    Some argue that using AI is more likely to lead to lots of people lose job, because it can substitute many low-skill jobs. In most industries, there are some jobs related to simple and repeat working process, which can be done by computers. To be specific, in manufacture factories, some of employees just are responsibility to wrap package, and this is totally can be finished by artificial intelligence. Furthermore, some industries required certain knowledge level, like consultancy, can also be partly substituted by computers. So, not only should the public pay attention to the development of high-technology, but also governments need to be alarmed the possibility of climbing of unemployment rate.

    On the other hand, some people are advocate of artificial intelligence because it can improve our living standards, by which artificial intelligence are applied into manufacture and service industries. For example, when manufacture industries are using artificial intelligence program, this means that companies can reduce a great amount of operating cost so that the sale price of products will be lower than before and more consumers can afford them. In addition, products produced by artificial intelligence have a higher qualified rate and the production time is shorter, because its precise and tireless.

    In conclusion, although the advent of AI will result in people’s unemployment, it is unquestionable that it is more beneficial to human.

    March 4, 2020 at 10:58 pm

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