Do small things in a great way

  • 3forad
    University: 中国矿业大学
    Nationality: 中国
    March 11, 2021 at 12:24 am

    Everyone yearns to fulfill his worldly ideal, nevertheless, scarcely a few individuals can reach the peak of perfection. It sounds like we commonplace human-beings can never become successful. Actually, doing trivial things in a great way, in this approach, we can also make our dreams come true. Sometimes we have to acknowledge that our capability is not sufficient to do something great. Nevertheless, we should be aware that it is the minor thing that great things originate from. Envisaged that we achieve slight things with superb performance, little by little, the minor things we have accomplished will finally add up to great things we strive for. The reason why this case will occur is that greatness rests in accumulation. Here comes an instance as followed. On condition that everybody starts to utilize recyclable paper bags instead of plastic ones, there is going to be immense depletion in plastic production. That is what we call minor things but it effects greatly indeed. From my own perspective, great things are derived from minor things, which implies mediocre characters also have the opportunity to make an enormous implication. There is no doubt that you will be less likely to repent your choice if you spare no effort to accomplish it.

    In conclusion, we can’t cease chasing dreams barely due to the inadequate capacity. Bearing in mind, provided that you cannot do great things, do trivial things in a great way, which equals the beginning of great things.

    March 11, 2021 at 4:52 am

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
    2. Lengthy paragraphs; restrict each paragraph to 110 words. (GRE essay 110-word qualifies for non-software revision; 90- word applies to TOEFL/IELTS essay ).

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    3forad
    University: 中国矿业大学
    Nationality: 中国
    March 11, 2021 at 8:56 am

    Everyone yearns to fulfill his worldly ideal. Nevertheless, scarcely a few individuals can reach the peak of perfection. It sounds like we commonplace human-beings can never become successful. Actually, do trivial things in a great way, and in this approach, we can also make our dreams come true.

    Sometimes we have to acknowledge that our capability is not sufficient to do something great. However, we should be aware that it is the minor thing that great things originate from. Envisage that we achieve slight things with superb performance. Little by little, the minor things we have accomplished will finally add up to the great things we strive for. The reason why this case will occur is that greatness rests in accumulation.

    Here comes an instance as followed. If everybody starts to utilize recyclable paper bags instead of plastic ones, there will be immense depletion in plastic production. That is what we call the minor thing but it effects greatly indeed. From my own perspective, great things are derived from minor things, which implies mediocre characters also have the opportunity attain success. There is no doubt that you will be less likely to repent your choice if you spare no effort to accomplish it.
    In conclusion, we can’t cease chasing dreams barely due to the inadequate capacity. Bearing in mind, provided that you cannot do great things, do trivial things in a great way, which equals the beginning of great things.

    March 11, 2021 at 4:35 pm

     

    Score: 69.4

    Issues:

    1. There are occasional grammatical errors and unclear pronouns.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    3forad
    University: 中国矿业大学
    Nationality: 中国
    March 12, 2021 at 9:57 am

    Everyone yearns to fulfill his worldly ideal. Nevertheless, scarcely a few individuals can reach the peak of perfection. It sounds like we commonplace human-beings can never become successful. However, do trivial things in a brilliant way, and in this approach, we can also make our dreams come true.

    Sometimes we have to acknowledge that our capability is not enough to do something great. However, we should be aware that it is the minor thing from which great things originate. Envisage that we achieve unimportant things with superb performance. Little by little, the insignificant things we have accomplished will finally contribute to the great things that we strive for. The reason why this case will occur is that greatness rests in accumulation.

    Here comes an instance as followed. If everybody starts to utilize recyclable paper bags instead of plastic ones, there will be immense depletion in plastic production. That is what we call the minor thing, but those things matter a lot indeed. In my opinion, great things are based on minor things and mediocre characters also have the opportunity be successful. There is no doubt that you will be less likely to repent your choice if you spare no effort to accomplish it.

    In conclusion, we can’t cease chasing dreams only due to the inadequate capacity. Bearing in mind, provided that you cannot do great things, do trivial things in a great way, which equals the beginning of great things.

    March 12, 2021 at 4:35 pm

    Everyone yearns to fulfill his worldly ideal. Nevertheless, scarcely a few individuals can reach the peak of perfection. It sounds like we commonplace human-beings can never become successful. However, do trivial things in a brilliant way, and in[ incorrect preposition ] this approach, we can also make our dreams come true.

    Sometimes we have to acknowledge that our capability is (not enough)[avoid using NOT  ] to do something great. However, we should be aware that it is the minor thing from which great things originate. Envisage that we achieve unimportant things[  vague word] with superb performance. Little by little, the insignificant things[ repetition ] we have accomplished will finally contribute to the great things[repetition  ] that we strive for. (The reason why this case)[ wordy ] will occur is that greatness rests in accumulation.

    Here comes an instance as followed[word form error  ]. If everybody starts[grammatical error  ] to utilize recyclable paper bags instead of plastic ones, there will[ grammatical error ] be immense depletion[reduction  ] in plastic production. That is what we call the minor thing, but those things matter a lot indeed. In my opinion, great things [repetition  ]are based on minor things and mediocre characters also have the opportunity be [ grammatical error ]successful. There is no doubt that you[ shift of person ] will be less likely to repent your choice if you spare no effort to accomplish it.

    In conclusion, we can’t cease chasing dreams only due to the[article error  ] inadequate capacity. Bearing in mind, provided that you cannot do great things, do trivial things in a great way[repetition  ], which equals the beginning of great things[repetition  ].