In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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  • yanglei
    University: xmu
    Nationality: china
    November 13, 2021 at 3:42 pm

    To be honest, it is not rare for me to hear people said how important it is that you should own a home. Nowadays, this situation is very common in China and some other countries. Why did this happen? I will express my thought as follow: First of all, the prices of flats and houses have been increasing sharply in recent years. What’s worse, they still have upward trends. Obviously, it is a serious situation which makes lots of people panic. They are afraid of that they can’t afford a home in their whole lives. That makes them eager to find a way to calm down their upset minds. Compared with renting a home, owning a home is much more stable. Secondly, most people don’t change their jobs frequently in some countries. In other words, they have a stable and regular life track. If you rent a home as your shelter, you may lose the control of it that is not the situation people are glad to see. If the owner of the home don’t want to rent it to you anymore, you have to find another place to settle down. For many people, it is an annoying situation which costs a lot of energy. Finally, if you own a home, you can rent it to others, which is an easy way to earn money. As far as I am concerned, it is a positive situation. Owning a home in your country, you may save more energy and money. If you only rent a home all the time, there are too many elements that can affect your life. That’s too frustrating. All in all, owning a home is better.

    November 15, 2021 at 12:24 pm

    To be honest, (delete) it is not rare for me (delete) to hear people said (verb form error) how important it is that you should (simplify) own a home. Nowadays, this situation is very common in China and some other countries. Why did this happen? (delete) I will express my thought as follow: (shortly summarize your opinion here) (separate into paragraphs, this should be the end of the introduction paragraph) First of all, the prices of flats and houses have been increasing sharply in recent years. What’s worse, they still have upward trends. Obviously, it is a serious situation which makes lots of people panic. They are afraid of that they can’t afford a home in their whole lives. That makes them eager to find a way to calm down their upset minds. Compared with renting a home, owning a home is much more stable. Secondly, most people don’t change their jobs frequently in some countries. In other words, they have a stable and regular life track. If you rent a home as your shelter, you may lose the control of it that is not the situation people are glad to see. If the owner of the home don’t want to rent it to you anymore, you have to find another place to settle down. For many people, it is an annoying situation which costs a lot of energy. Finally, if you own a home, you can rent it to others, which is an easy way to earn money. As far as I am concerned, it is a positive situation. Owning a home in your country, you may save more energy and money. If you only rent a home all the time, there are too many elements that can affect your life. That’s too frustrating. All in all, owning a home is better.

    November 15, 2021 at 12:24 pm

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