In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
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July 4, 2020 at 1:38 pm
In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
It is very significant to have your own home, which is better than renting others home. I stick to the opinion that this kind of phenomenon is a good thing.
Why is that the case? You might wonder. No one can deny that being an owner of your home acts as a determinant for people, with the result that it can give us a sense of security. Moreover, in some countries, house can be a symbol of social status. For example, it is hard for a man to get married with a woman in China, provided that he does not have a house.
Granted, some people may believe that this circumstance is bad considering that people have to save money to buy a house, which will render citizens stressful, especially when the price of house is very high in some countries. That said, I hold a firm belief that the condition is reasonable.
First and foremost, it is obvious that home is more than a place to live. It is a place which can give us a sense of belonging. For instance, almost everyone are happy to decorate their home, which is a precious experience. Provided that we rent others house, the homeowner will have some restrictive requirements on us, with the result that we cannot decorate it at will and we lose a happy experience.
Another consideration is that we need a stable circumstance to develop ourselves. Being the owner of a house can step up the stability of our lives, without which we may be tired to look for a place to rent as long as the owner do not continue to let us rent their house. It goes without saying that a successful future is wedded to a stable circumstance. Thus, private house acts as a catalyst for success.
In conclusion, we should adapt to the value that buying a house is very important.
July 6, 2020 at 3:29 pmScore: ungraded
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July 6, 2020 at 3:55 pmIt is very significant to have your own home, which is better than renting other people’s home. I stick to the opinion that this kind of phenomenon is a good thing.
Why is that the case? You might wonder. No one can deny that being an owner of your home is a determinant for people, because it can give people a sense of security. Moreover, in some countries, house can be a symbol of social status. For example, it is hard for a man to get married with a woman in China if he does not have a house.
Granted, some people may believe that owning a home is bad considering that people have to save money to buy a house. The circumstance will render citizens stressful, especially when the price of house is very high in some countries. That said, I hold a firm belief that the condition is reasonable.
First and foremost, it is obvious that home is more than a place to live. It is a place which can give us a sense of belonging. For instance, almost everyone are happy to decorate their home, which is a precious experience. Provided that we rent others house, the homeowner will have some restrictive requirements on us, with the result that we cannot decorate it at will and we lose a happy experience.
Another consideration is that we need a stable circumstance to develop ourselves. Being the owner of a house can step up the stability of our lives, without which we may be tired to look for a place to rent. It goes without saying that a successful future is wedded to a stable circumstance. Thus, private property acts as a catalyst for success.
In conclusion, we should adapt to the value that buying a house is very important.
July 6, 2020 at 4:01 pmIt [ unclear pronoun ] is very significant [ vague word ] to have your [informal ] own home, which is better than renting other people’s home [absolute statement ]. I stick to the opinion that (this kind of phenomenon) [ unclear ] is a good thing.
Why is that the case? You might wonder. No one can deny that (being an [article error ] owner of your home) [logically confusing ] is a (determinant for people) [unclear ], [punctuation error ]because it [unclear pronoun ] can give people a sense of security. Moreover, in some countries, house [ unclear/having a house ] can (be a symbol of) [wordy/symbolizes ] social status. For example [incorrect transitory word ], it [ unclear pronoun ] is hard for a man to get married with a woman in China if he does not have a house. [grammatical error/subjunctive voice ]
Granted, some people
maybelieve that owning a home is bad [unclear word ] considering that people have to save money to buy a house. (The circumstance will render citizens stressful, ) [ unclear]especially when the price of house is very high in some countries. That said [ wrong phrase ], I hold a firm belief that (the condition is reasonable) [unclear ].First and foremost, it [unclear pronoun ] is obvious that home is more than a place to live. It is a place which [ wrong pronoun ] can give us a sense of belonging. For instance, almost everyone are happy to decorate their home, which is a precious experience. Provided that we rent others [word form error ]house, the homeowner will have some restrictive requirements on us
, with the result that[. As a consequence, ]we cannot decorate it [unclear pronoun ] at will [punctuation error ]and we lose a happy experience.Another consideration is that we need (a stable circumstance) [ unclear ] to develop ourselves. Being the owner of a house can step up the stability of our lives, [ punctuation error ]without which we may be [ dull BE verb; use concrete verb] tired to look for a place to rent.
It goes without saying that[ Use your own words ]a successful (future is wedded to a stable circumstance) [ unclear ]. Thus,private[ proprietary ]property [ such as a house ] acts as a catalyst for success.In conclusion, we should adapt to the (value that buying a house is very important) [ unclear ].
