Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There has been a fierce debate about whether we can better achieve that goal now than before. People can make an easy choice Previously, people took the easy route because job vacancies were more limited in the past in the past are very few. But, I still believe that it is easier to find a promising job now due to the abundance of abundant professional choices and the rapid exchange of information quick information exchange in modern society.

First, there are more opportunities selections in the job market thanks to rapid economic development. To be specific, the expansion of online markets has resulted in provides people with more available jobs. For example, my mother used to work in a fabric company and repeatedly knit knitting blankets every day. It is quite obvious that she could not develop her career can not achieve a good career development by doing this the meaningless job. Later, she realized how online shopping would become prosperous and opened a store on the Internet. Not only did she earn more money by her diligent work, but she also found more meaning in her the value of life. Hence, the continuous economic progress, especially in online business, will offer people more promising jobs that are promising.

Second, our society has built a convenient communication platforms for people to exchange information, which will help people find  to recognize stable jobs. People who are anxious to find a suitable job can resort to various websites to collect the latest information. For instance, when my brother hunted for a job upon graduation, he consulted with several senior students about the potentials of some companies on the campus blog. He would not have found could hardly find an excellent job in such a limited time without the assistance of those graduate students. As a result, the handy access to information now enables people to find more a satisfying jobs.

To sum up In summary, it is no wonder that finding a job that can maintains a stable future is easier than before because people have more available choices and efficient information access in modern society.