Integrated Writing Cloud Seeding

The author of the passage lists three pieces of evidence to illustrate that cloud seeding is effective in controlling hail. However, the lecturer thinks the claims in the passage are inaccurate and implausible[ logical confusion with the prior sentence and big words used don’t make sense ].

First, as opposed to the author’s idea that experiment results prove[ grammatical error ] the effectiveness of cloud seeding, [lengthy clause  ]the lecturer [unparalelled / idea-lecturer  ]states that in the experiments, silver iodide prevents nearly all kinds of precipitation including hail, rain, and snow[ grammatical error ]. Although the hail decreases, the absence of the cloud may cause serious outcomes like drought[need to list at least another outcome  ]. Therefore, crops may be damaged because of lacking water[ grammatical error/passive ].

Moreover, the passage suggests that successful examples in Asian[ wrong word ] have shown that cloud seeding is effective. However, in these examples, cloud seeding was used in the urban area where the air was saturated with pollution produced by cars and industries. Due to the existence of pollution, silver iodide could interact with polluted materials and increased the possibility of controlling hail. As a result, cloud seeding may not be effective in the farming area where the air is pure and clean.

Finally, despite the author of the passage provides examples of controlling hail in the farming region by using cloud seeding, [ lengthy/grammatically wrong ]the lecture contends that the neighbor [  wrong word form]areas such as the southern and eastern areas where cloud seeding was not conducted also had declined hail[ grammatical error ]. In other words, the decrease of hail attributes to the natural variation instead of the cloud seeding[logicall wrong  ].