International tourism is now more common than before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What is your opinion on this?

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  • shangshu
    University: SNNU
    Nationality: China
    March 15, 2020 at 11:07 am

    International tourism is now more common than before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What is your opinion on this?

    With the development of worldwide economy, traveling around world is becoming more popular than before. Yet there remains some disappointment as to whether the effect of this trend is positive or negative. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that international tourism harms both to the environment and to local culture.

    First of all, global tourism destroys the natural ecosystem. It is reported that many animal species have died out during past 10 years. Despite the economy income,the destruction to the environment can’t disappear. For example, in some islands of Thailand,many fish species extincted. Those fishes are relying on specific water temperature. With the popularity of diving, the temperature is too high for them to survive. This kind of phenomenon  not only happens in Thailand, but also in all over the world. Besides, this trend also brings some pollution to the areas which are really fragile. With the popularity of hiking, the ecosystems of some mountains becomes disordered. These changes can’t to be turned back.

    Further and even more importantly, though, international tourism makes it more difficult to conserve different kinds of culture. Global tour makes it easier to mix different cultures.Like Africa, this ancient continent has many kinds of cultures. However,with the development of global traveling, tourists from all over the world bring different customs to the local residents. These customs change the habits from tradition,ranging from agriculture to languages.This situation brings long-term influence to the local culture.Without rightful policy,many cultures can’t be reserved in world history.

    In conclusion, although international tourism can stimulate the economy of some countries, it also destroys the natural environment and change the native traditions.

    March 16, 2020 at 1:09 am

    Score: 43.8

    Issues:

    1. More than 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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    shangshu
    University: SNNU
    Nationality: China
    March 16, 2020 at 7:17 am

    With the development of the worldwide economy, traveling around world is becoming more popular than before. Some people believe that this is a positive trend because it can stimulate the government finance.While others have opposite views. In my opinion, I believe that international tourism harms both to the environment and  local people’s life.

    First of all, global tourism destroys the natural ecosystem. It is reported that many animal species have died out during the past ten years. Despite the economic income, the environment destruction can’t disappear. For example, in some islands of Thailand,many fish species died out. Those fishes are relying on a specific water temperature. With the popularity of diving, the temperature is too high for them to survive. This kind of phenomenon not only happens in Thailand but also in all over the world. Besides, this trend also brings some pollution to the areas which are really fragile. With the popularity of hiking, the ecosystems of some mountains becomes disordered. These changes can’t to be turned back.

    Besides, international tourism makes it more difficult to conserve culture. Global tour makes it easier to mix different kinds of  culture. With the development of global traveling, tourists from all over the world bring different customs to the local residents. These customs change the habits,ranging from agriculture to languages.This situation brings long-term influence to the local culture.Without rightful policy,local cultures can’t be reserved.

    In conclusion, although international tourism can help the economy of some countries increasing, it also destroys the natural environment and change the native traditions.

    March 16, 2020 at 7:49 pm

    Score: 49.1

    Issues:

    1. More than 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.