It is always better to purchase in large stores than in several small shops that specialize in different items.

Score: 67.3

As a large part of our lives, shopping happens almost every day. When it comes to whether we should always purchase goods from large stores instead of several small shops that specialize in different items [non-original content  ], opinions vary depending on different personal experiences. A large number of people hold that we should always buy commodities from supermarkets. However, as far as I am concerned, although consuming in big stores can meet our needs in many aspects, we [inconsistency in person  ],still hope to shop in small stores.

Admittedly, in the large store, it [ unclear pronoun ]provides us assorted goods [ punctuation error ]and occasionally we could get a discount. Additionally, large stores always have a good location and possess available lots to park. However, those stores [ absolute writing ]are reluctant to cover [wrong word  ]any purchase situations. For example, the large stores are hardly selling professional telescopes and famous watercolors. Meanwhile, we can also find some advantages in small stores that specialize in different items.[  non-original content]

The first advantage of buying in those small stores is that we can experience a better service. Obviously, compared with [  article error]big stores, the small stores own less [ wrong word ]number of customers, so the waiters would like to introduce more details about our target merchandise. Besides, they[ unclear pronoun ] are more likely to enable[wrong word  ] us to use the target product so that we can recognize if the product can meet our needs. For example, when we buy a bicycle in a small bicycle shop, the shop owner will more possibly introduce us the details of a bike to us and encourage us to take a shot.

Another advantage that we buy specific items in small shops allows us to get the most appropriate item.[  unclear writing] I believe that we all have such [ article error ]experience that when we purchase a matter for the first time, we might only know the goods’ name. In the situation, an owner of a small store with rich experience may combine[  wrong word] what we expect and what they provide and then help us select the best one.[unclear pronoun  ]

Final Revision

Score: 75.4  Great job!

As a large part of our lives, shopping happens almost every day. In terms of whether we should always buy goods from large stores, varied ideas abound. A large variety[ number] of customers hold that we should buy commodities from supermarkets all the time. However, as far as I am concerned, although consuming in big stores can meet our needs in many aspects, I still prefer to shop in small stores now and then.

I admit that a large store is able to provide us with assorted goods. (Even we may come across a discount on it.)[remove; irrelevant ] In addition, the[ many] large stores might have a good location and possess available lots to park. However, the big store[ inconsistent/stores-store] is impossible to sell everything. For example, the supermarket[inconsistent ] is hardly selling professional telescopes and famous watercolors. Besides, we can find some advantages in small specializing[word form error ] stores.

The first advantage of buying in those small stores is that we can experience a relates to the better service they present. [ wordy] Compared to a big store, a small store has fewer customers. Therefore, the waiters from the small store would like to introduce more details about our target merchandise. In addition, those waiters are more likely to encourage us to try the target product so that we can assure if determine whether the tried product can meet our needs. For example, when we buy a bicycle in a small bicycle shop, the shop owner will more be able[wordy ] to introduce the details of a bike to us and inspire[ logical confusion/who inspires?] us to take a shot.

Another advantage that we buy specific items Shopping in small shops additionally allows us to buy the most appropriate items. Generally speaking, we all have such experience.[redundant ] When purchasing a matter[ wrong word] for the first time, for instance, we might merely know the goods’ name. In this situation, the experienced owner of a small/boutique store with rich experience may help match what we expect and what they provide (and then select)[ logical confusion] the best item.