It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay (full score).
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September 24, 2019 at 2:18 pm
TOEFL Writing Topic: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay. [full score]
I think that even if a person wishes to live and work in the city as an adult, it is usually better to grow up in the countryside. There are billions of people in the world who would disagree with my statement, but my opinion is based on my own experience.
My grandfather raised horses in a small village and my father also worked in this trade until quite recently. The economic situation in my region has changed a lot and naturally there are many more cars and fewer horses on the roads. I wasn’t sure what I was going to do!
I was very lucky to win a scholarship to study in Shenzhen. There were students from across the country in my university, but I was not surprised to discover that many of my classmates grew up near the city center. I noticed right away that these students tended to stay together in a group and they were much louder than those of us who came from the countryside. They got mad for no reason just like people do on television. Students who grow up in the city have different role models and I think growing up on a farm is less confusing for children.
If there are a lot of animals around it is not safe to get angry for no reason! But most of those students were only playing some kind of a city game. I guess I didn’t like it too much.
It is easier for a person to learn good manners in the countryside. The students from farms know how to help each other better. The students who grew up in the city didn’t help other students at my school very often. [288 words]
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