It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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August 3, 2021 at 3:52 pm
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I’m afraid I have to disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportation deserves.
Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know what happened these days or enjoy a movie using the Internet, they may be disturbed by the horrible Internet access. The problem is extremely terrible in some states of America.However, I have to point out that some of the disadvantages the improved Internet access may bring. When people are addicted to their smartphones, they could do nothing but laugh at the interesting things they saw on the screen. As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, their health may be threatened by their addiction. At the same time, they make no new friends anymore because they stay in the house and play with the things that are on the Internet.
So let us talk about the benefits that improving public transportation could give us. When public transportation is enhanced in an area, the economy of this area tends to increase as well because the business people and workers can waste less time on transportation. Thus, they could spend more time on work or consuming. For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai had been a problem a few years ago because the transportation takes people almost more than ten hours. So the government decided to construct some trains that can run so fast to improve transportation. As a result, people can reach the opposite city in less time than before, and the business communications between the cities had been more frequent than before. Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.
To sum up, improving public transportation is more essential. Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, the improvement also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with others. But improving public transportation could increase the economy of the area which owns better transportation.
August 3, 2021 at 3:56 pmI’m afraid I have to[ I ] disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportationdeserves[ does ].Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know what happened these days or enjoy a movie using the Internet, they may be disturbed by[unnecessary passive ] the horrible Internet access. The problem is extremely[ absolute statement ] terrible[vague word ] in some states of America.
However, I have to point out that some of the disadvantages the improved Internet access may bring. When people are addicted to their smartphones, they could do nothing but laugh at the interesting things they saw on the screen. As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, their health may be threatened by their addiction. At the same time, they make no new friends anymore because they stay in the house and play with the things that are on the Internet.
So let us talk about the benefits that improving public transportation could give us. When public transportation is enhanced in an area, the economy of this area tends to increase as well because the business people and workers can waste less time on transportation. Thus, they could spend more time on work or consuming. For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai had been a problem a few years ago because the transportation takes people almost more than ten hours. So the government decided to construct some trains that can run so fast to improve transportation. As a result, people can reach the opposite city in less time than before, and the business communications between the cities had been more frequent than before. Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.
To sum up, improving public transportation is more essential. Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, the improvement also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with others. But improving public transportation could increase the economy of the area which owns better transportation.
August 3, 2021 at 4:00 pmPartial revision [Fix same/similar problems and then resubmit your essay.]
August 5, 2021 at 11:47 amI disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportation does.
Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know what happened these days or enjoy a movie using the Internet, they may get disturbed by the horrible Internet access. The problem is severe in some states of America. However, I have to point out that some disadvantages the improved Internet access may bring. When people are addicted to their smartphones, they could do nothing but laugh at the interesting things they saw on the screen. As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, their addiction to the Internet may threaten their health. At the same time, they make no new friends anymore because they stay in the house and play with the things on the Internet.
So let us talk about the benefits that improving public transportation could give us. When public transportation is enhanced in an area, the economy of this area tends to increase as well because the business people and workers can waste less time on transportation. Thus, they could spend more time on work or consuming. For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai was a problem a few years ago because the transportation took people almost more than ten hours. So the government decided to construct the High-speed train to improve transportation. As a result, people can reach the opposite city in less time than before, and the business communications between the cities had been more frequent than before. Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.
To sum up, improving public transportation is more significant. Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, the improvement also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with others. But improving public transportation could increase the economy of the area which owns better transportation.
August 7, 2021 at 10:27 pmI disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportation does.
Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know what happened these days or enjoy a movie using the Internet, they may get disturbed by the horrible Internet access. The[ /this ] problem is severe in some states of America. However, I have to point out that some disadvantages the improved Internet access may bring[ grammatical error ]. When people are [/become ]addicted to
theirsmartphones, they could do nothing but laugh at the interesting things they saw [/ see ]on the screen. As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, their addiction[ subject fails to echo the prior sentence ] to the Internet may threaten their health. At the same time, they make no new friends anymore because they stay in the house and play with the things[ vague word ] on the Internet.So let us talk about the benefits that improving public transportation could give us. When public transportation is enhanced in an area, the economy of this area tends to increase as well because the business people and workers can waste less time on transportation[lengthy, unclear sentence. Split it. ]. Thus, they could spend more time on work or consuming[ word form error ]. For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai was a problem a few years ago because the transportation took people
almostmore than ten hours. So [ As a consequence, ]the [ Chinese/local ]government decided to (construct the High-speed train )[ unclear ][in an effort ]to improve transportation. As a result, people can reach the opposite city[ unclear] in less time than before, andthebusiness communications between the citieshad been more frequent than before[ intensified ]. Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.To sum up, improving public transportation is more significant. Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, the improvement[ repetition ] also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with others[unclear ]. But improving public transportation could increase[wrong word ] the economy of the area which[ incorrect pronoun ] owns better transportation.
August 12, 2021 at 2:27 amI disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportation does.
Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know what happened these days or enjoy a movie using the Internet, they may get disturbed by the horrible Internet access. The problem is severe in some states of America. However, I have to point out that some disadvantages that the improved Internet access may bring. When people become addicted to smartphones, they can do nothing but laugh at the interesting things they see on the screen. As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, they will endanger their health due to addiction to the Internet. At the same time, they make no new friends anymore because they stay in the house and play with the fresh stuff on the Internet.
So let us talk about the benefits that improving public transportation could give us. When public transportation is enhanced in an area, the economy of this area tends to increase as well. At the same time, people and workers can waste less time on transportation. Thus, they could spend more time on work or consumption. For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai was a problem a few years ago because the transportation took people more than ten hours. As a sequence, the local government decided to construct the High-speed train between Beijing and Shanghai in an effort to improve transportation. As a result, people can reach each other’s city in less time than before, and business communications between the cities intensify. Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.
To sum up, improving public transportation is more significant. Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, it also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with other people. But improving public transportation could boost the economy of the area that owns better transportation.
August 12, 2021 at 11:02 amI disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportation does. (add a short summary of why you disagree in a sentence here)
Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know what happened these days (the latest news) or enjoy a movie using the Internet (online), they may get disturbed by the (be may be hampered by) horrible Internet access. The problem is severe in some states of America. (delete) (start new paragraph here) However, I have to point out that (delete) some disadvantages that the (delete) improved Internet access may bring. When (For example,) people become addicted to smartphones, and they can do nothing but laugh at the interesting things they see on the screen (simplify). As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, they will (delete) endanger their health due to addiction to the Internet (simplify). At the same time, they make no new friends anymore because they stay in the house and play with the fresh stuff on the Internet. (simplify and combine the two previous sentences into one)
So let us talk about the benefits that improving public transportation could give us. (rewrite with better transition) When public transportation is enhanced in an area, the economy of this area (local economy) tends to increase as well. At the same time, people and workers can (delete) waste less time on transportation. Thus, they could spend more time on work or consumption. (combine the two previous sentences into one) For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai was a problem a few years ago because the transportation took people (trip) more than ten hours. As a sequence (In response), the local government decided to construct the High-speed train (built high-speed rail) between Beijing and Shanghai in an effort to (delete) improve transportation (travel times). As a result, people can reach each other’s city (other cities) in less time than before (reasonable times), and business communications (delete) between the cities intensify (verb tense error). Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.
To sum up, improving public transportation is more significant (than…?). Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, it also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with other people. But improving public transportation could boost the economy of the area that owns better transportation (boosts the economy and reduces travel times).
August 12, 2021 at 11:02 amFinal Revision
August 14, 2021 at 4:23 amI disagree with the statement that improving Internet access deserves more money from the government than improving public transportation does. Improving Internet access make people addicted to smartphones, but improving Internet access provides people with convenience.
Some may say that improving Internet access could help people get information more quickly. For example, when people want to know the latest news or enjoy a movie online, they may be hampered by horrible Internet access.
However, I have to point out some disadvantages that improved Internet access may bring. For example, when Internet access becomes more accessible, people will be addicted to smartphones, so they do nothing but laugh at the interesting things on the screen. As a result, people who spend lots of time on the phone tend to refuse outdoor activities. Therefore, they endanger their health and make no new friends anymore because of indulging in the Internet.
What deserves more attention are the benefits of improving public transportation. When public transportation is enhanced in an area, people waste less time on transportation and spend more time on work or consumption, so the local economy increases. For instance, traveling from Beijing to Shanghai was a problem a few years ago because the trip took people more than ten hours. In response, the local government built a high-speed rail between Beijing and Shanghai to reduce travel times. As a result, people can reach other cities in reasonable times, and business between the cities was intensified. Therefore, the economy improved in both two cities.
To sum up, improving public transportation is more significant than improving Internet access. Although improving Internet access provides us with some convenience, it also stops people from keeping healthy and making friends with others. But improving public transportation boosts the economy and reduces travel times.
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