Many filmmakers make movies based on books. Some people prefer to read the book before they watch the movie, while other people prefer to watch the movie before they read the book. Which one do you prefer?

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  • Jin
    University: Tinjin University
    Nationality: China
    September 20, 2020 at 3:31 am

    Many filmmakers make movies based on books. Some people prefer to read the book before they watch the movie, while other people prefer to watch the movie before they read the book. Which one do you prefer?

    Watching movie, as a basic element in our life, has triggered a heated discussed over which read books before watching movies or watching movies before reading books. Personal speaking, I think watching movies first is better chose, because it place us as beneficiaries on personal life.

    What must be prioritized is that through watching movie first, we can increase efficiency. initially, watching a movie, which is based on a book, can save our time. This is because the time we spend on watching a movie almost two or three hours; on the contrast, reading a well-known book acquire to spend 1or2 days. Moreover, when a projector make a movie, they will explore the most important contents in the books and add many other elements to make the movie more colorful or more impressive, like different perspective of one typical plot, various comments toward a specific story. In detail, it enables people obtain the whole story and comments of a movie. And it gives people an opportunity to gain more knowledge in limit time. All these enhance efficiency of getting information and recognizing things.

    What must be equal discussion is watching movie first good for us health. To explore further, watching movie help us avoiding sedentary and impairing one’s eyesight, which promote physical health. Everyone knows reading books must sit by the desk for long time in one certain posture, which produce negative effect on our health. On the other hand, watching movie will eliminate these influences, owing to its short time. According to a student at Piking University, a well-known educational institution, as an example. he said when he knows a movie, the first thing is to find its basic book, and then read it, which cause his fat and many body problems. According to this student, if he would had watched movie first, he could not have got disease.

    It is easy to conclude that watching movie first has many benefits both life and body. It not only can increase the efficiency of knowing a new thing, but also can keep health. Just like the examples above.

     

    October 2, 2020 at 5:22 pm

     

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