More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to access information . So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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  • foloco
    University: Shanxi Normal University
    Nationality: Chinese
    January 5, 2021 at 8:58 am

    More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to access information . So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this?

    Today, most people choose to use electronic devices reading or looking for information. Some people therefore believe that traditional materials would not be needed. In my opinion,despite the advantage of e-reading, print materials cannot be fully replaced.

    On the one hand. I admit that traditional media such as books, magazines and newspaper, already not popularity because of the prevalence of electronic devices and computers. For example, majority of information can be stored and indexed online for people to refer to, when people need the answer to a specific question or hope to find something that they need information they can most always receive on a computer on internet.

    In addition, people can read online news and e-magazines with their phone at any time. Compared to newspapers, this way allows people to useing their piece of time instead of use traditional style of reading that is tends to only sit in the office or classroom. After all, people are becomeing more and more busy and everyone always hopes to make full use of their time.

    On the other hand, even though electronic devices have many benefits for people, which does not mean that the traditional information tools should be replaced. The main reason is that the printed material can provide more reliable information than the online because it is always published after careful consideration of facts and is reviewed several times.

    Also, continuing to print magazines and books is that there are still many people all over the world, who either don’t access such technology or who are not comfortable with the use of computers and other such electronic devices. For example, the elderly people tend towards reading history in books instead of useing computers because of they may not know how to use the computer or other e-reading devices.

    In conclusion, e-reading materials are used widely in people’s live, while it can never completely replace the printed material such as books and periodicals. They will still remain an integral part of our education system and for the news.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    January 10, 2021 at 3:32 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 
    3. Lots of grammatical errors.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    foloco
    University: Shanxi Normal University
    Nationality: Chinese
    January 16, 2021 at 8:03 am

    More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to access information. So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this?

    Some people believe that traditional materials such as books, magazines and newspapers would not be needed as the advance of electronic devices today. In my opinion,despite the advantage of e-reading, printed materials still play a vital important roles.

    On the one hand. There are some benefits for people choose electronic devices to access information. Firstly, majority of information can be stored and indexed online for people to conveniently refer to , when people hope to find something that they need information they can most always receive on a computer efficiently. Secondly, using electronic devices, such as e-book or online-news, is more environment friendly comparing with printing of books and newspapers. Because when people purchase a great many of books and newspapers, it means that much more trees would be cut as raw materials for production. In addition, the fragment time is maximally utilized since people read by phone or other portable electronic devices an any time.

    On the other hand, even though electronic devices have many benefits for people, which does not mean that the print material should be banned. The main reason is that there are a lot of people who don’t use advanced electronics such as old people and children. This both groups requirements should not be ignored. Another reason, the printed material can provide more reliable information than the online. Because it is always published after careful reviewed several times, which avoid some mistakes in it. Finally, books also play a important role in our education system. It is bad situation if the students of elementary school learn via e-book rather than printed books.

    In conclusion, e-reading are used widely in people’s live, while it can never replace the printed books, magazines and newspapers . They will still remain an integral part of our education system and our lives.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    January 16, 2021 at 6:19 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
    2. About 35% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    foloco
    University: Shanxi Normal University
    Nationality: Chinese
    January 19, 2021 at 8:00 am

    More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to access information. So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this?

    Some people believe that traditional materials such as books, magazines , newspapers would not be needed as the advance of electronic devices today. In my opinion,despite the advantage of e-reading, printed materials still play a important role.

    On the one hand. There are some benefits for people use electronic devices to access information. Firstly, a great deal of information can be indexed online for people to conveniently consult .

    It is true that people can almost always find something that they need information on a computer efficiently. Secondly, using e-reading, such as e-book or online-news, is more environmentally-friendly comparing with printed books and newspapers. Because when people purchase a great many books and newspapers, it means that much more trees would be cut as raw materials for production. In addition, people read by phone or other portable devices at any time, which allow their to maximally utilize fragment of time.

    On the other hand, even though electronic devices have many benefits for people, which does not mean that the printed material should be banned. The main reason is that there are a lot of people who don’t use advanced electronics such as old people and children. Their requirements should not be ignored. Another reason, the printed material can provide more reliable information than the online. Because it is always published after carefully reviewed several times, which avoid some mistakes in it. Finally, books also play critical role in our education system. It would be a bad situation in elementary school where students learn via e-book rather than printed books.

    In conclusion, e-reading are used widely in people’s lives, while it can never replace printed books, magazines, newspapers. They will still remain an integral part of our education system and our lives.

     

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    January 19, 2021 at 4:03 pm

    Score: 54.8

    Issues:

    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 
    3. Lots of grammatical errors.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

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