Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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University: Renmin University of China
Nationality: Chinese

September 9, 2019 at 1:27 pm

TOEFL Writing Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Movies and television are popular ways of entertainment among people in modern society. However, I contend that they have more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behavior.

First of all, the fighting scene in movies and television teach young people how to act violently. For example, young people tend to imitate big heros’ motion of hitting their enemies with great power. According to a survey conducted by a group of psychologies in 1970s, the rate of young people acting violently is higher in the region where the violent movies are more popular. It is obvious that violent movies and television lead young people to fight.

Second, some young people may imitate the funny tricks played in the movies or television, no matter how dangerous they are. Many cool tricks shown on the screen are dangerous while most of the movies and television will not remind the audience that these tricks are played under guidance. In this case, young people who are easy to be attracted by these cool tricks and imitate them are in great danger. Recently, a girl in China followed a television program to make a popcorn bomb herself. Unfortunately, she was hurt when the bomb exploded and passed away five days later.

Third, movies and television always use some cool but evil characters to catch the audience’s eyes, which hides the mistakes of the characters and has negative influence on young people’s behaviors. For example, there are some movies describing killers. In the movies, the killers are incredibly calm and brave, although they kill others ramdomly. Young people who watch the movies may admire the strength and the courage of the killers but neglect the fact that they are committing a crime. What’s worse, these young people may grab a gun and act like the killers in the movies.

In a word, movies and television always show the violent,dangerous and illegal action. Young people, who like imitating and cannot judge the behavior on the screen rationally, are negatively affected.

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September 9, 2019 at 1:57 pm

Score: 62.5

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University: Renmin University of China
Nationality: Chinese

September 13, 2019 at 12:24 am

Movies and television are popular ways of entertainment among people in modern society. But in my eyes, they have more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behavior.

First of all, the fighting scene in movies and television teach young people how to act violently. For example, young people tend to imitate big heroes’ motion, through which they hit their enemies with great power. According to a psychological research conducted in the 1970s, the frequency of young people’s fight is higher in the region where violent movies are more popular. Apparently, violent films and television lead young people to be aggressive.

Second, some young people may imitate the cool but dangerous tricks played in the movies or television, which may make them injured. Many cool behaviors shown on the screen are hazardous, like playing fireworks or driving fast. However, most of the films and TV program will not remind the audience that these behaviors are under strict guidance. In this case, young people who are easy to be attracted by these cool tricks and imitate them are in great danger. Recently, a girl in China followed a television program to make a popcorn bomb herself. Unfortunately, she was severely hurt when the bomb exploded and passed away five days later.

Third, some characters in movies and television may break the law or treat others cruelly, but the movies or TV program just pose emphasis on their bravery and strength. As a result, young people do not realize the characters’ mistakes and cannot recognize their own illegal behaviors in real life. For example, there are some movies describing killers. In the movies, the killers are incredibly calm and brave, although they kill others arbitrary. Young people who watch the films may admire the killers’ excellent skills but neglect the fact that they are committing a crime. Consequently, these young people may also grab the gun and kill people around them.

In a word, violent, dangerous and illegal action are widely accepted in movies and television. Therefore, they have negative impacts on the way young people behave.

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September 18, 2019 at 2:34 am

Score: 63.3

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Lin Qiu

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li
University: Renmin University of China
Nationality: Chinese

September 18, 2019 at 12:22 pm

Movies and television are popular ways of entertainment among people in modern society. But in my eyes, they have more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behavior.

First of all, the fighting scene in movies and television teach young people how to act violently. For example, young people tend to imitate big heroes’ motion, through which they hit their enemies hard. According to a research conducted in the 1970s, the frequency of young people’s fight is higher in the region where violent movies are more popular. We can see that, violent films and television lead young people to be aggressive.

Second, some young people may imitate the eye-catching but dangerous tricks played in the movies or television, which may make them injured. Many cool behaviors shown on the screen are hazardous, like playing fireworks or driving fast. However, most of the films and TV program will not remind the audience that these behaviors are under strict guidance. In this case, young people who are easy to be attracted by these cool tricks and imitate them are in great danger. Recently, a girl in China followed a television program to make a popcorn bomb herself. Unfortunately, she was severely hurt when the bomb exploded and passed away five days later.

Third, some characters in movies and television may break the law or go against the ethics, but the films or TV program only pose emphasis on their bravery and strength. As a result, young people cannot realize the illegal or unethical behaviors both on the screen and in their own life. For example, young people may not realize how cruel killers are from the movies about killers. In the movies, the killers are incredibly calm and brave, although they kill others arbitrarily. Young audience may admire the killers’ excellent skills but neglect the fact that they are committing a crime. Consequently, these young people may also grab the gun and kill people around them.

In a word, violent, dangerous and illegal behaviors are widely accepted in movies and television. Therefore, they have negative impacts on the way young people behave.

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