Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology
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August 23, 2020 at 3:47 pm
Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?
In this globolised world, a noticeable topic is about the way of people maintain their interpersonal relationship with technological innovation and progress in modern world. This technology affects not only people’s personal social life, but also people’s working relationship via dozens of means. It’s a positive development in some concern conditions, however, this progress has some bad effects sometimes.
People’s life of emotion consist of two main points that private contacting and working relationship. Both of them influenced by technology. There are various innovative way of knowing about new friend or working partners. In working place, for instance, when they come into working place first time, they will be set a group chat in Enterprise Wechat for familiar with each other and also for convey working documents more easier. But other than that, contemporary youth often use social contact app to broaden their social circle, such as Dingding and QQ those support video call or writing words.
In these examples, we can see this technology progress improve the working efficiency and also subtly reduce the distance between strange people that make them less uncomfortable. In addition, people can maintain day-to-day contact with intimate friends or families when and where. But a coin has two sides, this actually almost replace the face to face contacting method, people have relied on the online interacting excessively while overlook the really emotion between people. It’s difficult to dig deep and get to know a real person behind a small screen. just an electronic screen would be no substitute for a warm hug or a sincere look.
In conclusion, technological progress does change the way of people realize new companions and raise efficiency of people developing a strong social relationship. So under this circumstance, we should take it right direction and rely on it in moderation.
August 25, 2020 at 12:08 amScore: 52.2
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August 26, 2020 at 7:58 amIn this globalised world, a noticeable topic is about the means that how people maintain their interpersonal relationship with technological innovation over the distance. This technology affects not only people’s personal social life but also people’s working relationship via dozens of means. I agree with this with some extent that it’s a positive development. However, this progress has some negative effects sometimes.
People’s emotional life includes two main points that private contacting and working relations. Both of them are influenced by technology. There are various innovative ways of knowing about proper new friends or working partners. In working place, when they come into a new department, they will be set a group chat in Enterprise Wechat for familiar with each other and also making convey working documents accessible. But other than that, contemporary youth often use social contact apps to broaden their social circles, such as Dingding and QQ those support video calls or writing words.
In these examples, we can see this technology progress improving the working efficiency and reducing subtly the distance between strange people that make them less uncomfortable. In addition, people can maintain closely contact with intimate friends or families when and where. But a coin has two sides, online contacting has almost replaced the face-to-face contacting method, people are over-reliant on the online interacting while overlooking the real emotion between people. It’s feeble to dig deep and get to know a real person behind a small screen. Only an electronic equipment would be no substitute for a warm hug or a sincere look.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that technological progress does change the means of people realize new companions and help people developing a strong social relationship. So under this circumstance, we should lead it to a positive direction and rely on it in moderation.
August 28, 2020 at 2:00 amNowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?
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People’s emotional life includes two main points that private contacting and working relations. Both of them are influenced by technology. There are various innovative ways of knowing about proper new friends or working partners. In working place, when they come into a new department, they will be set a group chat in Enterprise Wechat for familiar with each other and also making convey working documents accessible. But other than that, contemporary youth often use social contact apps to broaden their social circles, such as Dingding and QQ those support video calls or writing words.
In these examples, we can see this technology progress improving the working efficiency and reducing subtly the distance between strange people that make them less uncomfortable. In addition, people can maintain closely contact with intimate friends or families when and where. But a coin has two sides, online contacting has almost replaced the face-to-face contacting method, people are over-reliant on the online interacting while overlooking the real emotion between people. It’s feeble to dig deep and get to know a real person behind a small screen. Only an electronic equipment would be no substitute for a warm hug or a sincere look.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that technological progress does change the means of people realize new companions and help people developing a strong social relationship. So under this circumstance, we should lead it to a positive direction and rely on it in moderation.
August 28, 2020 at 2:04 amI couldn’t complete the revision of your essay since all sentences are problematic.
