Parents do not understand their children so well as parents do 50 years ago.
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December 20, 2019 at 2:13 am
Parents do not understand their children so well as parents do 50 years ago.
Nowadays, there is always a controversial statement that parents in modern society have weaker comprehension on their children than their counterparts in the past. From my perspective, this opinion does sound reasonable in some ways.
Firstly, parents in recent years have less opportunities to take care of their offspring. Due to the increasing living cost in modern society, parents suffer from extremely high pressure. For instance, they must work extra hours to pay for the rent or debt of apartment, which may cost half of their monthly incomes. Arriving home at 8p.m. or even later, young parents often leave the ward of children to the elders or nursery schools. This results in the lack of parents accompanying, and therefore, kids become less familiar with who gave birth to them, which aggravates the mutual understanding between them.
Additionally, the invisible gap between young generations and their parents becomes wider and wider. Children in new age are born and raised in advanced condition, ranging from nutrient supper to instrument lecture on weekend. This superior environment cultivates different thoughts and virtues of children, resulting in frequent debates between generations. Inharmony in family is often triggered by minute events, like squander of pocket money or staying outside for night that would never be understood by parents.
Furthermore, the relation of kids and parents is being challenged by new technologies. Smartphones and iPads is prevailing in recent years, and they have shown greatly attractions to children comparing to playing with humans. Kids can easily get the feeling of achievement and satisfactory when they pass over games on tablet. Artificial intelligence is also a competitor against parents in pleasing children, since its database consists of numerous jokes and bedtime stories. Undoubtfully, the relation of parents and kids cannot maintain firmly under this situation, and understanding is hard to achieve.
To sum up, comparing to our grandparents and their peers, new parents are more difficult to understand their kids, and thus they should pay more attention to the thoughts of children after work as well as enhancing communication in spare time.
December 20, 2019 at 2:26 amScore: 53.4
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December 20, 2019 at 3:53 amNowadays, there is always a controversial statement that parents in modern society have weaker comprehension of their children than their counterparts in the past. From my perspective, this opinion does sound reasonable in some ways.
Parents in recent years have fewer opportunities to take care of their offspring. Due to the increasing living cost in modern society, parents suffer from extremely high pressure. For instance, they work extra hours to pay for the rent of the apartment, which may cost half of their monthly incomes. Arriving home at 8 p.m. or even later, young parents often leave the ward of children to the elders or nursery schools. The busyness of parents results in the lack of companion. Kids are less familiar with who gave birth to them, which aggravates the mutual understanding in the family.
Additionally, the gap between young generations and their parents becomes wider and wider. Children in the new age are born and raised in advanced conditions, ranging from nutrient supper to instrument lecture on weekends. This superior environment cultivates different thoughts and virtues of children, resulting in frequent debates between generations. Inharmony is often triggered by minute events in the family, like squander of pocket money or staying outside for night that parents would never accept.
Furthermore, the relation between kids and parents deteriorates due to new technologies. Smartphones and iPads are prevailing and they have shown tremendous attractions to children comparing to playing with humans. Kids can simply obtain the sense of achievement and satisfaction when they pass over games on the tablet. Artificial intelligence is also a competitor against parents in pleasing children since its database consists of numerous jokes and bedtime stories. The relation between parents and kids cannot maintain firmly under this situation, and understanding is hard to achieve.
To sum up, comparing to our grandparents and their peers, new parents are more difficult to understand their kids. They should pay more attention to the thoughts of children after work and enhance their communication in spare time.
December 20, 2019 at 9:06 pmScore: 56.9
Nowadays, there is always[absolute writing ] a controversial statement [factual error ]that parents in modern society have weaker comprehension of their children than their[ unclear pronoun/parents or children? ] counterparts in the past. From my perspective, this opinion does sound reasonable in some ways.
Parents in recent years have [ grammatical error ]fewer opportunities to take care of their offspring[ word form error ]. Due to the increasing living cost in modern society, parents suffer from extremely high pressure[ really? ]. For instance, they work extra hours to pay for the rent of their apartments, which may cost half of their monthly incomes[ word form error ]. Arriving home at 8 p.m. or even later, young parents often leave the ward of children to the elders or nursery schools. The busyness of parents results in the lack of companion[unclear/whose companion? ]. Kids are less familiar with who gave birth to them[ confusing ], which aggravates the mutual understanding in the family.
Additionally, the gap between young generations[ word form error ] and their parents becomes wider and wider[ redundant ]. Children in the new age are born and raised in advanced [ incorrect word]conditions, ranging from nutrient supper to instrument lecture on weekends. This superior environment cultivates different thoughts and virtues of children, resulting in frequent debates between generations. [ lack of transitional word/s ]Inharmony is often triggered by [ passive]minute events in the family, like squander of pocket money or staying outside for night that parents would never accept. [ ]
Furthermore, the relation between kids and parents deteriorates due to new technologies. Smartphones and iPads are prevailing and they have shown tremendous attractions to children comparing to playing[unparalleled comparison/ smartphones and iPads-playing ] with humans. Kids can simply obtain the sense of achievement and satisfaction when they pass over[? ] games on the tablet. Artificial intelligence is also a competitor against parents in pleasing children since its database consists of numerous jokes and bedtime stories. The relation between parents and kids cannot maintain firmly under this situation, and understanding is hard to achieve.
To sum up, comparing to our grandparents and their peers, new parents are more difficult[ logical confusion/new parents find it more difficult… ] to understand their kids. They [unclear pronoun/grandparents, or parents, or kids? ]should pay more attention to the thoughts of children after work and enhance their communication in[ lack a modifier ] spare time.
