People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing?
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December 1, 2019 at 1:54 pm
IELTS Task 2: People are never satisfied and always want more. In what ways is this a good thing and in what ways is this a bad thing?
With the development of the economy and technology, people have the chance to purchase a more diverse living style. Some people become greedy for material possessions, while others are eager to be rich in their souls.
In my opinion, dissatisfaction is a boost for purchasing higher mental experience, as well as deep science researches, while it can also lead to over materialistic.
As the old saying goes: People eat bread to live, but not live for bread. Our daily lives are far more than eating, working and sleeping. Domains such as art and literature can bring us about lots of wisdom as well. If we possess a high aesthetic culture, we can have more common topics with a group of friends, and they will find us an interesting soul. Furthermore, human society is propelled by the dissatisfaction for our current state. We try our best to discover numerous scientific theories and create many inventions to raise our working-force in order to accumulate more wealth. Dissatisfaction is the reason why we had two Industry Revolutions and Science Revolution.
However, dissatisfaction brings about greedy. People aspire to earn a high salary, and they want bigger houses and more luxurious cars. They connect wealth and material possessions with happiness and success. In some extreme cases, dissatisfaction causes greed and crime. We should return to traditional values like sharing.
In conclusion, people are all willing to hunt for more. However, sometimes, the priority is to enrich our mental world.
December 3, 2019 at 8:55 pmScore: ungraded
With the development of the [article error ] economy and technology, people have the chance to purchase [ wrong word ] a more diverse [wrong word ] living style. [ lack logical connection with the prior sentence ] Some people become greedy for material possessions, while others are eager to be [ Be verb] rich in their souls.
In my opinion, dissatisfaction [ logical incompleteness ] is a boost for [ wordy; use verb ] purchasing higher mental experience [ difficult to understand ] , as well as deep science researches [ spelling error ] , while it can also lead to over/ excessive materialistic.
As the old saying goes: People eat bread to live, but [ grammatical error/coordinating word use ] not live for bread. Our daily lives are far more than eating, working and sleeping. [ Lack of logical connection from the prior sentence ] Domains such as art and literature can bring us about [ preposition error ] lots of wisdom as well. If we possess a high aesthetic culture [ grammatical error/subjunctive voice ] , we can [ grammatical error/subjunctive voice ] have more common topics with a group of friends, and they will find us an interesting soul. Furthermore, human society[ logical error ] is propelled by the dissatisfaction for [ wrong preposition ]our current state. We try our best to discover numerous scientific theories and create many inventions to raise our working-force[ wrong word] in order to accumulate more wealth. [ Lack of logical connection from the prior sentence ] Dissatisfaction is the reason why we had two Industry Revolutions and Science Revolution.
However, dissatisfaction brings about greedy[ word form error ]. People aspire to earn a high salary, and[wrong word ] they want bigger houses and more[ lack of comparision] luxurious cars. They connect wealth and material possessions with happiness and success. In some extreme cases, dissatisfaction causes greed and crime. [ Lack of logical connection from the prior sentence ]We should return to traditional values like sharing.
In conclusion, people are all willing to hunt for more[ unclear ]. [ Lack of logical connection from the prior sentence ]However, sometimes, the priority is to enrich[wrong word ] our mental world.
December 4, 2019 at 2:35 pmNowadays, our living standard is raised because society becomes abundant in material life. Some people are unsatisfied with the wealth they already have. They become greedy for material possessions, while others try to pursuit mental enrichment.
In my opinion, dissatisfaction with the present states encourages people to pursuit a more colorful lifestyle. It also helps us to make progress in scientific domains, On the contrary, the dissatisfaction can also lead to excessive materialistic.
As the old saying goes: People eat bread to live, but they are not living for bread. Our daily lives are far more than eating, working and sleeping. People shouldn’t be merely content with basic living activities. We can improve our daily enjoyment by learning other domains, such as art, literature, and philosophy. If we possess a high aesthetic taste, we can have more common topics with a group of friends, and they will find us an interesting soul. Furthermore, our living quality is improved because we are not content with the current state and try to change it. We discovered new scientific theories and created many inventions to raise our productivity in order to accumulate more wealth. Dissatisfaction is the reason why we had two Industry Revolutions and Science Revolution.
However, dissatisfaction brings about greed. People aspire to earn a high salary. They want bigger houses and more luxurious cars. They connect wealth and material possessions with happiness and success. In some extreme cases, people hunt for fame and wealth by all means, regardless of invading other’s rights and then cause crime. We should return to traditional values like sharing.
In conclusion, people are all willing to earn more possessions. However, sometimes, a contented mind is a perpetual feast.
December 4, 2019 at 9:39 pmScore: 60.6
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December 10, 2019 at 9:39 pmNowadays, our living standard [make plural] is raised because society becomes [verb tense errors] abundant in material life [rephrase]. Some people are unsatisfied with the wealth they already have. They become greedy for material possessions, while others try to pursuit mental enrichment [combine last two sentences].
In my opinion, dissatisfaction with the present states [make singular] encourages people to pursuit [verb tense error] a more colorful lifestyle. It also helps us to [delete] make progress in scientific domains,[punctiuation error] On the contrary, the [delete] dissatisfaction can also lead to excessive materialistic [use noun form].
As the old saying goes: People [capitalization error] eat bread to live, but they are not living for bread. Our daily lives are far more than eating, working and sleeping. People shouldn’t [should not] be merely content with basic living activities. We can improve our daily enjoyment by learning other domains [change to “subjects”], such as art, literature, and philosophy. If we possess a high aesthetic taste [rephrase/simplify], we can have more common topics [change to “interests”] with a group of friends, and they will find us an interesting soul [rephrase/simplify]. Furthermore, our living quality [change to “quality of life”] is improved because we are not content with the current state [rephrase] and try to change it. [add transitional phrase]We discovered new scientific theories and created many inventions to raise our productivity in order to accumulate more wealth. Dissatisfaction is the reason why [delete] we had two Industry Revolutions and [add article]Science Revolution.
However, dissatisfaction brings about [change verb] greed. People aspire to earn a high salary. They want bigger houses and more luxurious cars. They connect wealth and material possessions with happiness and success. [combine the previous three sentences] In some extreme cases, people hunt for fame and wealth by all means, regardless of [rephrase] invading other’s rights and then cause crime [verb tense error]. [add transitional phrase]We should return to traditional values like sharing.
In conclusion, people are all willing to earn more possessions [rephrase]. However, sometimes, a contented mind is a perpetual feast [rephrase].
