Some people think that with the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, people lose the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
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March 29, 2020 at 4:39 am
Some people think that with the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, people lose the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Electronic devices are gaining importance in societies. While I accept that these devices may explain the loss of the ability to communicate face to face, I believe they benefit humans in some respects.
People today may lack time to communicate in reality. The internet connects individuals and occupies excessive time. Many people prefer to chat online or play electronic games, rather than hiking or camping with friends. Yet face to face conversations require practice. Without spending time with humans, people may lose interaction skills and the ability to manage conflicts. Furthermore, mobiles and computers can make people less desire to maintain relationships. To a large extent, technology products have fulfilled people’s expectations. Thus, they might get used to look at screens, with ignorance of family time.
On the other hand, people can capitalize this innovation to create communication opportunities. This technology has shortened the distance among individuals. It provides a platform for people to communicate at any time or place. For instance, some business partners once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now they can achieve this goal by a video call. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled. Some people, due to physical diseases, cannot communicate in usual. However, with the help of electronic devices, they can type messages or record videos to convey information. They would not need to worry about talking at a slow speed that troubles others.
In conclusion, as with any new technology, its effects on humans depend on how we use it. It may block communication, but it can also be helpful.
April 1, 2020 at 12:32 amScore: 58.8
Electronic devices are gaining importance in societies. While I accept that these devices may explain the loss of the ability to communicate (face to face) [ spelling error], I believe they benefit humans in some respects.
People today may lack time to communicate in reality. The internet connects individuals and occupies (excessive time)[unclear ]. [missing transitory word/phrase ]Many people prefer to chat online or play electronic games, rather than hiking or camping with friends[grammatical error/ learn how to use ‘prefer …to ‘ ]. Yet face to face [spelling error ]conversations require practice. Without spending time with humans, people may lose interaction skills and the ability to manage conflicts. Furthermore, mobiles and computers can make people less desire to maintain relationships. [ lack logical connection with the prior sentence ]To a large extent, technology products have fulfilled people’s expectations. Thus, they[ unclear pronoun] might get used to look [word form error ]at screens(, with ignorance of family time)[unclear ].
On the other hand, people can capitalize this innovation to create communication opportunities.[ off topic/rephrase ] This technology [idea introduced without preparation ]has shortened [the distance among individuals)[wordy/ social distancing ]. It[unclear pronoun ] provides a platform for people to communicate at any time or place. For instance, some business partners once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now they can achieve this goal by a video call. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled
. Some people, due to physical diseases, cannotthat fail to communicate in usual. However, with the help of electronic devices, they can type messages or record videos to convey information. They would not need to worry about talking at a slow speed that troubles others.In conclusion, as with any new technology, its effects on humans depend on how we use it. It may block communication, but it can also be helpful.[ too many IT; use nouns. ]
April 1, 2020 at 8:37 amElectronic devices are gaining importance in societies. While I accept that these items may explain the loss of people ’s ability to communicate face-to-face, I believe they benefit humans in some respects.
People today may lack the time and motivation to communicate offline. The internet connects individuals and occupies the most time in daily lives. This is because many people prefer to chat online or play electronic games, rather than hike or camp with friends. Yet face-to-face conversations require practice. Without spending time with humans, people may lose interaction skills and the ability to manage conflicts. Furthermore, people could lose their desires to maintain relationships, after immersing in the virtual world. To a large extent, technology products have fulfilled people’s expectations. Thus, people might be more accustomed to computer displays than to talk with family members.
In contrast, with the increasing use of connected devices, some people have improved their efficiency of communication. Those inventions enable humans to communicate at any time or place. Thus, people can capitalize on phones to save time. For instance, some business partners once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now they can achieve this goal by a video call. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled who fail to communicate as usual. With the help of electronic devices, they can type messages or record videos to convey information. They would not need to worry about talking at a slow speed that troubles others.
In conclusion, as with any new technology, its effects on humans depend on how we use it. Phones or computers may block communication, but they can also be helpful.
April 4, 2020 at 1:10 amScore: 58.9
Electronic devices are gaining importance in societies. While I accept that these items [ change a word ] may explain[ logical confusion/unrestrained use of them… ] the loss of people ’s ability to communicate face-to-face, I believe they benefit humans in some respects.
People today may lack the time and motivation to communicate offline. The internet connects individuals and occupies (the most time in daily lives)[awkward writing ]. [choppy sentence ]This is because many people prefer to chat online or play electronic games,[punctuation error ] rather than hike or camp with friends. Yet face-to-face conversations require practice[ unclear ]. Without spending time with humans, people may lose interaction skills and the ability to manage conflicts. Furthermore, people could lose their desires to maintain relationships, [ punctuation error]after immersing in the virtual world. To a large extent, technology products have fulfilled people’s expectations. Thus, people might be [use concrete verb ]more accustomed to computer displays than to talk with family members[ awkward writing ].
In contrast, with the increasing use of connected devices, some people have improved their efficiency of communication. Those inventions[poor organic connection with the prior sentence ] enable humans to communicate at any time or place. Thus, people can capitalize on phones to save time. For instance, some business partners once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now they can achieve this goal by a video call. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled who fail to communicate as usual. With the help of electronic devices, they can type messages or record videos to convey information. They would not need to worry about talking at a slow speed that[logical confusion ] troubles others.
In conclusion, as with any new technology, its[unclear pronoun ] effects on humans depend on how we use it[ unclear pronoun ]. Phones or computers may block communication, but they can also be helpful.
[Most sentences are poorly connected. Make sure the subject of a sentence echoes the subject, or the object, of the prior sentence.]
April 6, 2020 at 1:41 pmElectronic devices are gaining importance in societies. With unrestrained use of them, I accept that people may lose the ability to communicate face-to-face, but those devices may benefit some minority groups.
People today may lack the time and motivation to communicate offline. The internet connects individuals, luring people to immerse themselves in the virtual world. Due to such services, people prefer to chat online rather than face-to-face. Therefore, those people may lose interaction skills, because they have little time to practice their communication skills in the real world. At the same time, those people attracted to the internet could lose the desire to use their communication skills. To a large extent, technology products have fulfilled people’s expectations. A person thus might find it unnecessary to maintain relationships with friends. From the perspective of his/her friends, they may think this person loses the ability to speak properly.
In contrast, with the increasing use of connected devices, some people have improved their efficiency of communication. This is because phones or computers enable humans to communicate at any time or place. For instance, some business partners once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now they can achieve this goal by a video call. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled who fail to communicate as usual. With the help of electronic devices, they can type messages or record videos to convey information. They would not trouble others due to their abnormal speaking speed.
In conclusion, concerning the effects of phones or computers, they may block communication at first, but they are also beneficial to communication in some respects.
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April 16, 2020 at 12:32 amScore: ungraded
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April 17, 2020 at 10:24 amElectronic devices are gaining importance in societies. In my opinion, human communication abilities could decline, owing to these devices, but they may benefit people in some respects.
People today may lack the time and motivation to communicate offline. The internet connects individuals, luring people to immerse themselves in the virtual world. Due to such services, people prefer to chat online rather than face-to-face. Thus, they may lose interaction skills, with little time to practice them in the real world. Meanwhile, people attracted to the internet could lose the desire to communicate. To a large extent, technology products have fulfilled people’s expectations. Thus, a person may no longer bother to speak in a proper way to maintain a relationship.
In contrast, some people have capitalized on connected devices to communicate. This is because phones or computers connect individuals, without the boundaries of distance and cost. For instance, people once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now a phone can take the place of airplanes. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled who fail to communicate as usual. With a phone, they can act like normal people, as they can type messages or record videos to convey information.
In conclusion, phones or computers may block communication at first, but those devices are also beneficial to some minority groups
April 22, 2020 at 2:36 amScore: 56.9
Final Revision
Electronic devices are gaining importance in societies. [ poor connection from the prior sentence/subject of a sentence should echo the subject/object of the prior sentence. ]In my opinion, human communication abilities could decline, owing to these devices, but they may benefit people in some respects.
People today may lack the time and motivation to communicate offline. The internet connects individuals, luring people to immerse themselves in the virtual world. Due to such services, people prefer to chat online rather than face-to-face. Thus, they may lose interaction skills, with little time to practice them in the real world. Meanwhile, people attracted to the internet could lose the desire to communicate. To a large extent, technology[ word form error ] products have fulfilled people’s expectations. Thus, a person may no longer bother to speak in a proper way to maintain a relationship.
In contrast, some people have capitalized on connected devices to communicate. This is because phones or computers connect individuals, without the (boundaries of distance and cost)[ unclear ]. For instance, people once flew all over the world to negotiate, but now a phone can take the place of airplanes. Moreover, this trend may benefit the disabled who fail to communicate as usual. With a phone, they can act like normal people, as they can type messages or record videos to convey information.
In conclusion, phones or computers may block communication at first, but those devices are also beneficial to some minority groups.
