People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (Full Score)
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October 23, 2019 at 1:48 pm
TOEFL Writing Sample: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. (Full Score)
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One day I was doing a job with my father that I did not like doing at all. My father noticed my hesitation and he spoke to me gently. He said that it was a job we needed to do for our family. I was only ten years old, but the way he said it impressed me and even today I can remember his kind words.
For three days every week I go to work in a factory making shoes. I am studying English because I want to find work overseas after I graduate. Because I got a scholarship to the small university in my region of the country, I do not need to work full time in the shoe factory. But the money I can save working is always sent to my family. So I cannot worry about not liking my job. It will only be for a short time.
It is also important to be able to work with other people doing simple things. For that reason I think it is important for everyone to work at some jobs they don’t like. Anyway, the workers can make a game of their jobs and try to win. Then doing something that isn’t much fun would be more fun.
I do not want to do something I don’t like for very long. My father also once said to me that being poor is not a bad thing, but he also said that it is always important to try to make your life better.
So, I think my answer is both yes and no. Yes, I sometimes have to do jobs I don’t like and I think it is not such a bad thing, but I definitely do not want to do work at those jobs forever.
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