People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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  • Timmothy Ling
    University: Soochow University
    Nationality: China
    May 31, 2020 at 1:55 pm

    People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    I am of the opinion that it can be reasonable that we should do things we do not enjoy sometimes.

    Admittedly, Every individuals in this big world has their own specialties, personalities, tempers, which means everyone becomes a special part of the world. Thus, it turns out that we can not find something adjusting to the fancy of us all. And there exists a series of fixed rules in our society. As such, sometimes people have to foce themselves to do something they do not enjoy. It can be painful for us by doing so. However, life can not always be the way we like. Sometimes we can benefit a lot subsequent to the painful process.

    First of all, study must be a hot topic when it comes to the unwilling-doing things. A majority of students can not relish from studying, but the benefit brought by studing exceed our imagination. To mention some, Study leave a permanent effect on students, it enrich the scope of their knowledge, develop their personalities, instruct them to be a gentleman. Though the effect may be invisible, it actually exists.

    Second, under the increasingly fast pace of life, people are paying less attention to health. In effect a modest number of people are willing to spend an hour in gym. Fitting becomes a prevalent topic these years. While it still belongs to the minority. Though people know the benefits brought by fitting, such as strengthen our flexibilities and endurance, keep a slim shape, alleviate our pressure, etc, a few people can go out for exercises sometimes even when they are free. Health accounts for a great many in our life, it is everything’s fundation. For such reasons, we can not lay too much emphasis on health.

    In short, we should pay more attention to things we do not enjoy, especially those with invisible benefits, although we might have a painful process by doing them.

    June 3, 2020 at 10:21 pm

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