Reading for pleasure can better develop one’s imagination and language skills than watching TV can. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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  • HSTX
    University: Nanchang University
    Nationality: China
    April 11, 2020 at 6:20 am

    Reading for pleasure can better develop one’s imagination and language skills than watching TV can. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    With the popularization of electronics such as television, increasing number of people choose watching TV as their major way to relax rather than reading. Some people argue that the latter is better on strengthening one’s imagination and language skills. But I believe they are both effective approaches.

    Reading, as a classical way to enjoy oneself, certainly presents a variety of novels, newsletters, editorials, specialized papers, etc., which delivery authors’ stories, ideas or intentions in form of characters. The way of how to use language correctly and accurately could be learned by the readers in a subtle way. Also, readers would image the pictures or event procedures when they browse these literacy works.

    In spite of it, we can not deny the apparent benefits of watching TV, which has become an indispensable form of recreation for mankind nowadays. Languages are transmitted not only in words on subtitles, but in sounds to people who watches TV. Therefore, it is an advanced approach to people train audiences’ language skills as they need to dispose diverse forms of language at the same time. Besides, TV programs supply audiences with more extensive and visualized recreational experiences. It is the way that impress audiences more deeply. For example, the images of the battle between human beings and exotic creatures in science fictions would come into one’s mind once their friends discuss the exploration of the outer space in the future.

    In conclusion, in my view, reading and watching TV are both great choices as recreational modes to boost people’s language and imagination skills.

    April 11, 2020 at 1:36 pm

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    HSTX
    University: Nanchang University
    Nationality: China
    April 12, 2020 at 2:50 pm

    With the popularization of electronics such as television, an increasing number of people choose to watch TV. Some people argue that to strengthen one’s imagination and language skills, reading for enjoyment is more satisfactory than watching TV. I disagree with the view.

    Reading, a traditional way to enjoy oneself, presents a variety of novels, newsletters, editorials, specialized papers, etc.. It transfers authors’ stories, ideas, or intentions in the form of characters. Also, reader could learn how to use language correctly and accurately in a subtle way when they read literature. Also, the pictures of stories come to readers’ mind when they browse these literary works.

    Although reading does benefits people, the obvious advantages of watching TV, which has become an indispensable form of recreation, is undeniable. Languages are transmitted not only in words on subtitles but in sounds to people who watch TV. Thus, it is an advanced approach for people to train audiences’ language skills as they need to understand diverse forms of language at the same time. Besides, TV programs supply audiences with more extensive and visualized recreational experiences. It is the way that deeply impresses audiences. For example, the images of the battle between human beings and exotic creatures in science fiction would come into one’s mind once their friends discuss the exploration of outer space in the future.

    In conclusion, although both the two activities are sensible ways for relaxation, watching TV render more development since it provides vivid pictures and clear language than reading does.

    April 12, 2020 at 3:29 pm

    Score: 53.5

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    HSTX
    University: Nanchang University
    Nationality: China
    April 13, 2020 at 5:47 am

    In the era of rapid technological progress, an increasing number of people watch TV in their leisure time. Some people argue that reading could strengthen one’s imagination and language skills better than that of watching TV does. I disagree with the view.

    Reading, a traditional way to enjoy oneself, transfers authors’ stories, ideas, or intentions in the form of characters. When someone reads literature, they could learn how to use language in a subtle way. For instance, people can use idioms learned in literacy works to express their notions naturally. In addition, the pictures of stories come to readers’ minds when they browse these literary works. It helps to cultivate imagination skills to some extent.

    Although reading does benefit people, the obvious advantages of watching TV is undeniable. Languages are transmitted not only in words on subtitles but in sounds to people who watch TV. That makes audiences need to understand languages in forms of sounds from loudspeakers and words on subtitles. Thus, this supplies people with more advanced approach to train audiences’ language skills. Besides, TV programs supply audiences with more extensive and visualized recreational experiences. People would recall the pictures they watched before when they participate in relevant discussions. For example, when the audiences’ friends discuss the exploration of outer space, the images of the battle between human beings and exotic creatures in science fiction probably form in their minds.

    In conclusion, both the two activities are sensible ways for relaxation. I believe watching TV render more development since it provides vivid pictures and clear language.

    April 14, 2020 at 2:59 am

    Score: 58.8

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