Responsible tourists could preserve the local culture and environment. Some think it’s impossible to become responsible tourists

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Responsible tourists could preserve the local culture and environment. Some think it’s impossible to become responsible tourists

  • Maggie_1115
    University: /
    Nationality: China
    November 1, 2020 at 11:50 am

    Responsible tourists could preserve the local culture and environment. Some think it’s impossible to become responsible tourists. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    There is a general debate in society over the topic of tourists’ duty in preserving the cultural and environmental status quo of the hosting region. Although some assert being a “responsible tourist” is idealistic, I am firmly convinced that traveler’ s consciousness to the local circumstrances can be boosted through the following instruments.

    First of all, imposing government regulation is an effective measure to deter immoral behaviors from the visitor. Such regulation may involve specific penalty to cooresponding level of destruction caused by the travelers, which is widely used in conserving historical heritage and scarce biota. For example, in Singapore, it was “Chewing Gum Law” that published in 1992 to forbid chewing gums in Singapore, as its non-degradable nature, if not disposed properly, may not only put a strain on the urban sanitation, but also increase the risk for wild animals, like pigeons, to swallow by accident. And the offenders will incur serious punishments up to imprisonment. In this way, travlers are forced to be become obligatory for the local environments and cultures as well as for themselves.

    In addition, apart from the actions could be taken by the authoritative organizations, displaying frequent traveling advice is also plays a significant role. Perhaps, the so called “irresponsible tourists” were merely fail to be informed with the consequences of not maintaining the native culture and environment during a journey. At this moment, it is traveling advice that can advocate the importance of cilvil tourist on sustaining indigenous features while setting up a higher moral benchmark for the entire tourism industry. Take persuasive advertisement for instance, a common allocation of traveling advices, in which the contents may instruct travelers to meet the local travling standard in a creative approach. It facilitates the protection to the folk culture and environment along with arousing the intrinsic sense of responsibility in every traveler.

    To sum up, though of challenge the object on achieve the complete cultural and environmental preserving habit for all tourists, I am optimistic about the foreseeable enhancement in cultivating accountable tourists when the appropriate administrations and propagandas are applied.

    November 8, 2020 at 4:22 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    3. Spelling errors
    4. Article errors

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Maggie_1115
    University: /
    Nationality: China
    December 7, 2020 at 2:27 am

    There is a general debate in society over the topic of tourists’ duty to preserve the hosting region’s cultural and environmental status quo. Although some assert being a “responsible tourist” is idealistic, I am firmly convinced that travelers’ consciousness for the local circumstances can be boosted through the following instruments.

    First of all, imposing government regulation is an effective measure to deter immoral behaviors from the visitor. Such regulation may involve specific penalty to a corresponding level of destruction caused by the travelers, which is widely used in conserving historical heritage and scarce biota. For example, in Singapore, it was “Chewing Gum Law” that published in 1992 to forbid chewing gums in Singapore, as its non-degradable nature, if not disposed properly, may not only put a strain on the urban sanitation, but also increase the risk for wild animals, like pigeons, to swallow by accident. And the offenders will incur stringent punishments up to imprisonment. In this way, travelers are demanded to become obligatory for the local environment and culture as well as for themselves.

    Apart from the direct legislation imposed by the authoritative organizations, displaying frequent traveling advice also plays a significant role. Perhaps, the so called “irresponsible tourists” were merely fail to be informed with the consequences of not maintaining the native culture and environment during a journey. At this moment, it is traveling advice that can advocate the importance of cilvil tourist on sustaining indigenous features while setting up a higher moral benchmark for the entire tourism industry. Take persuasive advertisement for instance, a common allocation of traveling advices, in which the contents may instruct travelers to meet the local traveling standard in a creative approach. It facilitates the protection for the folk culture and environment and raises the intrinsic sense of responsibility in every traveler.

    To sum up, though of challenge the object on achieving the complete cultural and environmental preserving habit for all tourists, I am optimistic about the foreseeable enhancement in cultivating accountable tourists when the appropriate administrations and propagandas are applied.

    December 12, 2020 at 10:01 pm

    Score: 29.9

    Issues:

    1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 40% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.