Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

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  • Abandon2Zenith
    University: Xi’an Jiaotong University
    Nationality: China
    October 2, 2020 at 6:18 am

    Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

    Some people believe that scandals are useful because they can attract public attention on social problems in a different way from speakers and reformers, and thus they argue that scandals are useful. In my humble opinion, scandals that could expose unhealthy societal phenomena and prompt problem-solving are valuable, whereas scandals that only serve to capture public attention are meaningless.

    Those who completely deny the value of scandals think that social change require an appeal of a speaker or an implementation of a reformer. For example, a speech of Martin Luther King triggered a surge of demand for freedom and equality; speakers and reformers make Facebook response immediately to the leaked door scandals. In above examples, the efforts of speakers and reformers are crucial to the solution of problems. Without their promotion, these scandals can only obtain momentary attention.

    However, it is precisely because of scandals in these areas that have revealed social problems and have attracted public attention on them that speakers and reformers believe these unhealthy phenomena urgent enough to need solving, and take effort in solving problems. For example, Martin Luther King’s Civil Rights Movement originated from the scandal that a black woman refused to give her seat to a white woman, eventually jailed; the scandal of Facebook’s leaked gate caught public attention, and prompt relevant authorities to investigate this matter. From this perspective, the scandal attract public attention to problem, prompting speakers and reformers to these problems and solve them as soon as possible. Such scandals possess positive significance in the progress of society. It can be said the purpose of such scandals is to eliminate similar scandals in the further and similar problems from happening again.

    Even if social problems are not solved, such scandals will allow us to look at exposed issues from different views. For example, earthquake happened in 2011 endangered dozens of students in Japan. A speaker may comment the valiantly of rescue team and claim the inevitability of disaster. However, scandals exposed later shows that the calamity could have been avoided if teachers had taken correct measures. What’s more, the Prism Gate, a secret and illegal surveillance to citizens by NSA and FBI, infringe the privacy of citizens. Though it has not been prevented, Snowden still improve people’s consciousness of privacy protection.

    Of course, some people think that the gossip scandals of celebrities can attract our attention into unknown side of a celebrity, and this type of gossip could be very entertaining. However, such scandals not only have no positive effect on social progress, but also have no substantial social mean, even have negative impact on children. What’s more, many media spread fake news to capture momentary attention. For example, there are many fabricated and deliberate created news on social media such as Twitter. Such scandals not only consume public’s attention, but also damage relevant people or organizations. If not controlled, they will mislead more people.

    In a sum, in regard of scandals that expose unhealthy aspects of society, attracting public attention will increase the sense of urgency and need for a speaker and a reformer to solve problem. Such scandals are valuable. At the same time, such scandals can also allow people view things from a new perspective. Whereas, there is no real worth in scandals that have no substantial value in solving social problems, such as gossipy scandals and deliberately created scandals.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    October 2, 2020 at 6:44 pm

    Score: 51.4

    Issues:

    1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Abandon2Zenith
    University: Xi’an Jiaotong University
    Nationality: China
    October 17, 2020 at 2:14 am

    Some people believe that scandals are useful, because the scandals can attract public attention on social problems in a different way from speakers and reformers. In my humble opinion, scandals that could expose unhealthy societal phenomena are valuable. Such scandals can also prompt problem-solving. By contrast, scandals that only serve to capture public attention are meaningless.

     

    Those who completely deny the value of scandals think that social change requires an appeal of a speaker or an implementation of a reformer. For example, a speech of Martin Luther King triggered a surge of demand for freedom and equality. In above example, the efforts of speakers and reformers are crucial. Without their promotion, these scandals can only get momentary attention.

     

    However, it is precisely because of scandals in these areas that have reveal social problems and attract public attention that speakers and reformers can notice them. Scandals make speakers and reformers believe that these unhealthy phenomena urgent enough to need to be solved, and take efforts to solve problems. For example, Martin Luther King’s Civil Rights Movement originated from a scandal. In this scandal, a black woman refused to give her seat to a white woman, eventually jailed. From this perspective, the scandal attracts public attention to problems, prompting speaker and reformers to solve the problems as soon as possible. Such scandals have positive significance in the progress of society. It can be said the purpose of such scandals is to eliminate similar scandals in the future.

     

    Even if social problems are not solved, such scandals will allow us to look at exposed issues from different views. For example, earthquake happened in 2011 endangered dozens of students in Japan. A speaker may comment the courage of rescue team and claim the inevitability of disaster. However, some media exposed scandals later. The scandals shows that the calamity could have been avoided, if teachers had taken right measures. What’s more, the Prism Gate infringe the privacy of citizens. It is a secret and illegal surveillance to citizens by NSA and FBI. Though it has not been prevented, Snowden still improve people’s consciousness of privacy protection.

     

    Of course, some people think that the gossip scandals of celebrities can attract our attention into in unknown side fo celebrity. This type of gossip could be very entertaining. However, such scandals have no positive effect on social progress, and have no substantial social mean, even having negative impact on children. What’s more many media spread fake news to capture momentary attention. If not controlled, they will be mislead more people.

     

    In a sum, in regard to scandals that expose unhealthy aspects of society, the scandals can attract public attention, increasing the sense of urgency ,and prompting speakers and reformers to solve problems. Such scandals are valuable. At the same time, such scandals can also allow people to view things from a new perspective. Whereas, there is no real worth in scandals that have no substantial value in solving social problems.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    October 19, 2020 at 3:02 pm

    Score: 55.5

    Issues:

    1. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
    2. Article errors
    3. Verb form errors
    4. Preposition errors

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.