Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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  • Lewy
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: Chinese
    May 18, 2020 at 1:38 pm

    Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

    It is undeniable that human kind has been doing harm to the environment in various ways. However, I argue that for both governments and individual people, there is still many a choice to protect the nature.

    People damage the environment in visible and invisible ways that are both irreversible and should be stopped. Humans change the environment at their wills, sometimes turning forests into farmlands where crops are yielded and expelling animals from homes. These are unacceptable in homes to wildlife and can bring unavoidable damages to local ecosystem. Furthermore, plants and factories omit exhausted gases and pour poisonous water during the process of the production, ignoring other creatures in the vicinity. For example, in London, waste liquids poured into Thames River used to cause the disappearance of some endangered animals, and gases from coal plants influenced adversely genetic structure of fauna and flora in the neighbourhood.

    Although the environment has been increasingly serious, governments and individual people can eliminate or tackle it in various ways. On the other hand, governments can introduce laws suggesting the punishments for producers’ releasing waste materials beyond the laws. Governments also can tax the pollution, collecting fines for building infrastructures of protecting the environment. On the other hand, individuals should observe the laws concerning the environment. People can participate in and propagate environmental protection campaigns, making more people aware of the significance of doing this.

    In conclusion, although the environment faces serious damages by people’s misbehaviours, governments and individuals can still contribute to making the planet better.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 18, 2020 at 8:48 pm

    Score: 38.2

    Issues:

    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. Failed to answer the question in the topic directly.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    Lewy
    University: Wuhan University
    Nationality: Chinese
    May 19, 2020 at 3:58 am

    It is undeniable that mankind has been doing harm to the environment in various ways. However, I argue that for both governments and individual people, there is still many a choice to protect the environment.

    Of all kinds of damages to the environment, deforestation and wasted material pollution are the most serious. Humans change the environment at their wills, turning forests into farmlands where crops are yielded and expelling animals from homes. These are unacceptable in homes to wildlife and can bring unavoidable damages to native ecosystem. Furthermore, plants and factories give off exhausted gases and dump poisonous water during the process of the production, ignoring other creatures in the vicinity. For example, in London, sewage poured into Thames River used to cause the disappearance of some endangered aquatic animals, and gases from coal plants influenced adversely genetic structure of nearby fauna and flora.

    Although the environment problem has been increasingly serious, governments and individual people can eliminate damages or tackle the problem in various ways. On the one hand, governments can introduce laws suggesting the punishments for producers’ releasing waste materials beyond the laws. Governments also can tax plant owners on their pollution, collecting fines for building infrastructures in order to protect the environment. On the other hand, individuals should observe the laws concerning the environment. If people devote themselves to propagating environmental protection campaigns, there will be more people aware of the significance of protecting the environment.

    In conclusion, although the environment faces serious problems, governments and individuals can still contribute to making the planet better.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    May 23, 2020 at 2:00 am

    Score: 38.3

    Issues:

    1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.