Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like

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  • whothatwhothat
    Nationality: Chinese
    November 2, 2020 at 3:48 pm

    Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

    There are always ongoing debates when it comes to university education. Some people attach lots of importance to subjects like science technology and they hold the opinion that university students should only study these “useful” subjects, which I cannot agree.

    Indeed, nowadays science and technology is significant for the development of society and we should by no means underestimate its role in university education. However, everyone has their own talent and special interest. Not all students are born to study science. Some write well and some draw beautifully. If Picasso had been forced to learn physics instead of arts, he would not have been so successful and we would not be able to enjoy his heart-touching masterpieces.

    Moreover, although some subjects are not as practical as science and technology, they are still useful in different ways. For example, literature cannot promote the technological advance or build robots, but through literature, people can explore a different world where we can swim in the boundless sea of philosophy. Another case in point would be language learning. Learning foreign languages cannot make us outstanding scientists or great businessmen, yet it equips us with knowledge about exotic cultures and broadens our horizon so that we will not be stupidly shocked in front of cultural differences. As a result, we cannot assert that such subjects are less useful or not worth learning.

    In short, we can safely draw the conclusion that university students should be allowed to study subjects they like or even tailor their own curriculum.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    November 8, 2020 at 4:26 pm

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    whothatwhothat
    Nationality: Chinese
    November 16, 2020 at 6:05 am

    People have different views about whether university students should focus on useful subjects like science and technology. While such subjects may contribute to the development of society, I believe students should be allowed to choose what they want to study at university.

    Indeed, science and technology do facilitate contemporary society, benefiting both our life and the economy of the country. Developing such subjects enables us to live a more convenient life. For example, we can pay bills with our phones without the bother of all kinds of coins and our healthy data can be analyzed scientifically so that we can lead a healthy lifestyle. Also, with a higher level of technology, it will become possible to introduce artificial intelligence into factories, replacing manual labor, which will boost productivity significantly and in turn accelerate the economy. As such, it is necessary to encourage students to study science and technology.

    Nevertheless, it definitely will not be feasible to turn science technology into a compulsory course. On the one hand, forcing everyone to study a subject will probably cause adverse effects. This will enhance the biased view towards science and technology, not to mention promoting the learning of this subject. On the other hand, for students who are not willing to further their studies in this area, university life will become painful for them, which does no good for their future. Less careful students may even deteriorate science programs because such work requires intense concentration and absolute passion for this subject.

    In conclusion, we should by no means ignore the important role science and technology play in society, but university students should have access to other classes as well.

    Administrator
    University: University of Wisconsin
    November 20, 2020 at 3:52 am

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