At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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  • qianyatong
    University: university of chinese academy of sciences
    Nationality: china
    July 10, 2020 at 1:30 am

    At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

    I value the sports and social acitivities with great importance and it do need more attention to give. I agree that they should have the same financial support as classes and libiraries.

    Firstly,it is controversial whether the college can foster excellent student that can change the world ,and most people need to come to the society.Nowadays,people tend to make school a good place to study the theory and protect students from the real word.It is great to give student a safe and comfortable enviromment,but it also damage their imaginition of the real word.When they come to the social life,then may not belive what they learned in the university and have little time to change their mind and behavior.But if universities give the enviroment to know the real social life and the time to think about the problems and solutions,it do both good to their study in theory and social ability .

    Secondly, people give too much attention on konwledge rather than critical thinking and critial thinking need pratice in life. when we look the history of human,many scientists came out the great idea because their observation of life,not the study of the theory and books.And peolpe have the same creativity as the peolpe in the past.if we consider that as true,it is obvious that every person should have their own understanding of the world  and it can not tauguht by the books only.What’s more, people can listen a lecture or look for other materials through internet.Thus, classes and libiriaries should not always be the most important part of college life,and the cut down may give student the signal to learn more through life obversation.

    Last but not least,sports give student a good control of themselves,it not just good for their body but also for their mind.Nowadays,peole have a lot of stress in the daily study life.Sports is a good way to relieve the pressure and let the students consider more about their own not just the world outside

    July 10, 2020 at 2:16 am

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