Teachers influence children more than parents

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  • shayne
    University: 华南农业大学
    Nationality: china
    April 4, 2019 at 5:37 am

    Title: once children start school, teachers have more influence than parents on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    Schools are the important places of education and teachers are the vital part. In my view, teachers can help develop students’ intellectuality and promote social development.

    Teachers decide indoor and outdoor activities, which is beneficial to students’ intellectuality and social development. Since teachers have undergone specialized training and they are familiar with educational knowledge. They will design relevant activities such as knowledge games and field research for their students. Encouraging students to think actively and find some useful answers for society are the main function of activities. In contrast, parents who lack an in-depth knowledge of curriculum content may not be able to help their children.

    On the other hand, students can develop their own intellectuality and society could make progress because teachers provide students with guideline and rules. Teaching methods could change children’s views toward different things like learning habits and communication skills. Right attitude helps to apply students at study and knowledge gained from learning boosts social development.

    However, parents can discipline and interact with their children when children stay at home. Parents are more willing to help their children to develop good learning habits and social manners. Therefore, student may perform well at school and become a responsible citizen. In a long term, society will be increasingly developmental.

    In conclusion, although parents are the first teachers of children, children will spend massive time with teachers once enrolling on schools. Therefore, I believe that teachers are more essential to students than their parents.

    April 6, 2019 at 10:08 pm

    Problems (1)

    The essay scores 42.5 in the test, which is considered difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences (fewer than 20 words), using less difficult words to improve readability.

    Good results (5)

    Passive voice: You’re using enough active voice. That’s great!

    Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!

    Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!

    Sentence length: Great!

    Transition words: Well done!

    Regards,

    Lin Qiu

    shayne
    University: 华南农业大学
    Nationality: china
    April 7, 2019 at 3:18 pm

    Schools are the important places of education and teachers are the vital part. In my view, teachers can help develop students’ intellectuality and promote social development.

    Teachers decide indoor and outdoor activities, which is beneficial to students’ intellectuality and social development. Since teachers have undergone specialized training and they are familiar with educational knowledge. They will design relevant activities such as knowledge games and field research for their students. Encouraging students to think actively and find some useful answers for society are the main function of activities. In contrast, parents who lack an in-depth knowledge of curriculum content may not be able to help their children.

    On the other hand, students can develop their own intellectuality and society could make progress because teachers provide students with guideline and rules. Teaching methods could change children’s views toward different things like learning habits and communication skills. Right attitude helps to apply students at study and knowledge gained from learning boosts social development.

    However, parents can discipline and interact with their children when children stay at home. Parents are more willing to help their children to develop good learning habits and social manners. Therefore, student may perform well at school and become a responsible citizen. In a long term, society will be increasingly developmental.

    In conclusion, although parents are the first teachers of children, children will spend massive time with teachers once enrolling on schools. Therefore, I believe that teachers are more essential to students than their parents.

    April 9, 2019 at 3:37 pm

    Hi, below is your edited essay.

    https://writersforme.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/04/20190408-edit.pdf

    Best wishes,

    Lin Qiu