The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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    University: 江南大学
    Nationality: 中国
    June 8, 2020 at 3:18 pm

    The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

    The bar chart compares the proportions of males and females in six age categories who were physically active on a regular basis in the year 2010.

    It is very clear that the figure for females 45 to 54 years old is the highest, and the figure for males 35 to 44 years old is the lowest.

    The figure for females at 15 to 24 years old is only 47.7 percent ,much lower than the figure for males, which is 52.8 percent. however, as the age increases, the figure for females begin to rise and peaked at the age group 45 to 54.

    By contrast, the figure for males began to decrease after the age 24, and went as low as 39.5 percent. It then began to rise and finally went about the same height as females at the age 65, where males are 46.7 percent and females are 47.1 percent.

     

    June 8, 2020 at 9:27 pm

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