The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends on consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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  • evelyn
    University: 西南财经大学
    Nationality: 中国
    June 8, 2020 at 10:55 am

    The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends on consumption of fast foods. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

    Since fast food was invented in the twentieth, Britain’s obsession with ready meals has reached staggering proportions, especially with hamburgers,pizza, fish and chips. To look for insights into Britain’s consumption of fast food, we launched an investigation which mainly centered on the impacts of income and times change.

    The column chart reflects the different consumption preference among different income groups. From the overall view, it’s easy to find that the expenditure of fast food in the high and average income groups are far more than the low income group. As can be seen from the diagram, hamburgers account for the largest proportion of consumption preference between the high and average income groups, especially in the high income group, while the low income group tends to choose fish and chips. In contrast with hamburgers, pizza appears to be less popular with Britain’s people.

    According to the line graph, it’s apparent that the consumption of hamburgers and pizza both increased from 1970 to 1990, while the consumption of fish and chips remained the downward trend except for 1985 to 1990, although it was the most popular in 1970. What calls for special attention is that the popularity degree of hamburgers is far ahead.

    Through the analysis, the reasons for this phenomenon are as follows. The income is one of the most significant factors which people take into consideration when they are choosing fast food. Hamburgers have become more and more popular owing to their delicacy and convenience.

    Though with different kinds of factors which impact people’s preference, all these facts indicate Britain’s obsession with fast food.

     

    lly
    University: hunan
    Nationality: china
    June 8, 2020 at 12:50 pm

    nice

    June 8, 2020 at 9:34 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.