The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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May 12, 2020 at 2:08 pm
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The three charts illustrate three nutrients that may be harmful if eaten too much in the regular meals consumed in the USA, which are sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. Overall, more sodium and saturated fat are consumed in dinner and more added sugar is consumed in snacks.
According to the first pie chart of sodium, 14% of it is consumed in both breakfast and snacks, 29% is consumed in lunch and 43% is consumed in dinner. Then next is the pie chart of saturated fat, 16% is consumed in breakfast, 26% is consumed in lunch, 37% is consumed in dinner and 21% is consumed in snacks. And finally comes the pie chart of added sugar, 16% is consumed in breakfast, 19% is consumed in lunch, 23% is consumed in dinner and 42% is consumed in snacks. It is obvious that the consumption of sodium is the biggest in dinner, the consumption of added sugar is the biggest in snacks while people in America consumed little three nutrients during breakfast time than other meals.
In conclusion, the diagrams show that American people eat too much food contained unhealthy nutrient in dinner and snacks.
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May 15, 2020 at 7:20 amThe three charts illustrate the average proportions of three nutrients consumed by American in the regular meals. The three types include sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar. They can be harmful if overeaten. Overall, most consumption of sodium and saturated fat is in dinner and most consumption of added sugar is in snacks.
The first pie chart shows the average proportions of sodium. Dinner, which is 43%, is the most consumption.Then is lunch with 29%, followed by breakfast and snacks, they are both 14%. The second chart is about the average proportions of saturated fat. 37% of it is consumed in dinner. Next is lunch, which is 26% followed by snacks, making up 21%; and finally come breakfast at 16%. The last chart illustrates the percentage of added sugar. Snacks contain the most amount, which is 42%. Then is dinner with 23% while lunch is 19% and breakfast includes 16%.
In conclusion, these diagrams show that American people eat too much food contained unhealthy nutrients in dinner and snacks.(at least 14%)
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