The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

  • sss
    University: University
    Nationality: China
    December 14, 2022 at 3:40 am

    The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and the amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    These two charts demonstrate the trends of ownership of electrical appliances and time spent on housework respectively between 1920 and 2019, which is one century, in one country. Generally, the former kept rose, while the latter decreased in contrast.

    The percentage of households with refrigerator shows a rapid up trend, surging from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. Similarly, the percentage of households with vacuum cleaner kept increasing from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000, but slowlier than that with refrigerator. They both kept on the peek after reaching 100.

    Although the percentage of households with washing machine grew from 40% in 1920 to around 75% in 2019, it still declined nearly 5% between 1960 and 1980.

    As the ownership electrical applpiances considerably climbed, the time spent on housework dropped significantly, from 50 hours per week per household in 1920 to around 15 hours in 1980, before slightly falling to about 11 hours in 2019. Note that the year 1980 when it reached a bottom, is also the year when the ownership of electrical appliances reached a peek.

    sss
    University: University
    Nationality: China
    December 14, 2022 at 4:04 am
    December 14, 2022 at 10:06 pm

    These two charts demonstrate the trends of ownership of electrical [appliance ownership  ]appliances and [, as well as the  ]time spent on housework [ , ]respectively[ , ] between 1920 and 2019,( which is one century, in one country)[  unclear]. Generally, the former kept rose[word form error  ], while the latter decreased in contrast.

    The percentage of households with refrigerator [ word form error ]shows a rapid( up trend)[spelling error  ], surging from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. Similarly, the percentage of households with vacuum cleaner[ word form error ] kept increasing from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000, but slowlier (than that with refrigerator)[ unclear ]. They[ unclear pronoun ] both kept[/stayed  ] on the peek after reaching 100.

    Although the percentage of households with washing machine[word form error  ] grew from 40% in 1920 to around 75% in 2019, it still declined [by  ]nearly 5% between 1960 and 1980.

    As the ownership [ of ]electrical applpiances [spelling error  ]considerably climbed, the time spent on housework dropped significantly, from 50 hours per week per household in 1920 to around 15 hours in 1980, before slightly falling to about 11 hours in 2019. Note that the year 1980 when it[ unclear pronoun ] reached a bottom, is also the year when the ownership of electrical appliances reached a peek[spelling error  ].

    December 14, 2022 at 10:14 pm

    Final revision

    sss
    University: University
    Nationality: China
    December 15, 2022 at 9:09 am

    VERSION 2 [MODIFIED]

    These two charts demonstrate the trends of electrical appliance ownership, as well as the time spent on housework, respectively, between 1920 and 2019 in one country. Generally, the former kept rising, while the latter decreased in contrast.

    The percentage of households with refrigerators shows a rapid uptrend, surging from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980. Similarly, the percentage of households with vacuum cleaners consistently increased from 30% in 1920 to 100% in 2000, albeit whose growing speed was slowlier than that of refrigerator ownership. Both household and refrigerator ownership stayed on the peak after reaching 100%.

    Although the percentage of households with washing machines grew from 40% in 1920 to around 75% in 2019, it declined by nearly 5% between 1960 and 1980.

    On the contrary, the chart of the time spent on housework illustrates a downtrend. As the electrical appliance ownership considerably climbed, the time spent on housework dropped significantly, from 50 hours per week per household in 1920 to around 15 hours in 1980, before slightly falling to about 11 hours in 2019. Note that when the number reached a bottom in 1980, the ownership of electrical appliances reached a peak in a opposite tendency.

    sss
    University: University
    Nationality: China
    December 15, 2022 at 9:12 am

    hey @Administrator . Thanks for your comments. I’ve revised my eaasy and I’d appreciate it if you could give me further advice.

    December 15, 2022 at 3:15 pm

    Sorry. I don’t work on essays after ‘final revision’.

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