The most important investment for a big company is to improve the efficiency and proficiency of its employees.

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  • Helena Gao
    University: the experimental high school of Peking University
    Nationality: China
    March 19, 2020 at 2:22 pm

    The most important investment for a big company is to improve the efficiency and proficiency of its employees.

    When we think about a big company, what might come to mind is a bountful place, including workers whose ability are both efficient and proficient. From my perspective, it is not too much of a stretch to say that these investments are too fly in the face of their initial anticipation.

    Admittedly, to improve employees’ efficiency and proficiency does have it merit. For a small company, a more efficiency employee can not only at play when he comes into a difficult official problems,but also induce the whole company to come into effect to increase productivity. However, A large corporation, such as Google, usually contains thousands of employees and several large subcompanies. So just like it would be a mistake to underestimate individuals, so t would be to gloss over it weakness when we try to induce big company into a new statute. What they tend to do to manage the company is to see the company as a web-like system, in the form of a subtle situation that everyone can control their own space but not hurt any other interests when part of it has come into trouble.

    Second, to improve employees’ efficiency and proficiency might cause negative influence when employees loss sustainance. A mature worker who gain proficient skill is rare. At that time, people who become more mature can do the job-hopping for a higher salaries. Training employees in big company can turn to be serious finiantial burden because they have only cost for train but without any feedback when the training program is getting finish. It is definitely a great loss no matter whether the company is big or not.

    Besides, the investment on big company can be huge when is had to do with marketing. Companies need to compete with each other by invest on many things, such as letter stocks or futures. Training employees are too much difficult than investment, which you need to hire certain instructers that may unrealible. The manager can sit in their office to do investment and watch others companies to bring interests for the manager’s own company.

    March 24, 2020 at 2:10 am

    Score: 58

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    Helena Gao
    University: the experimental high school of Peking University
    Nationality: China
    March 26, 2020 at 2:01 pm

    When we think about a big company, we may think about a place of wealth, which include large amounts of employees who are efficient and proficient. However,  it is not too much of a stretch to say that these investments are too fly in the face of their initial anticipation, within the reasons below, from my perspective.

    It is not too much to say that improving employee’s efficiency and proficiency does have its merit. For a small company, an efficient employee can not only at play when he comes into a difficult official problem, such as a mistake in the computer program, but also induce the whole company, thus push the whole company to come into effect to increase productivity. However, benefits to the small company cannot be said on a large corporate. Large corporate involves a complicated business system that a small company could not achieve. For example, the technical giant, Apple, manages thousands of employees and several sub-companies. Apple regards its company as a web-like system. Everyone owns their place, but would not hurt any other interests.

    Second, improving employees’ efficiency and proficiency might cause negative influence when employees lose sustenance. A mature worker who possesses a proficient skill is rare. At that time, people who become more mature will retire for a higher salary. Thus, the employee’s training can turn out to be a serious financial burden. Companies have only cost for the train but without any feedback when the training program is getting finish. It is definitely a great loss no matter whether the company is big or not. To improve the investments for a big company may not be the first choice.

    Besides, the investments in big companies can be huge when it had to do with marketing. Companies need to compete with each other by invest in many things, such as letter stocks or futures. Training employees are too much difficult than investment. The manager can sit in their office to do investment and watch other companies to bring interests for the manager’s own company.

    March 29, 2020 at 1:45 am

    Score: Ungraded

    When we think about a big company, we may think about a place of wealth [incorrect word in this context  ], which include [grammatical error  ]large amounts[wrong word  ] of employees who are efficient and proficient. However,  it is (not too much of a stretch)[ wordy ] to say that these investments[idea without introduction  ] are (too fly in the face of their initial anticipation, )[  unclear](within the reasons below, from my perspective)[ absurd writing ].

    It is not too much to say[wordy  ] that improving employee’s efficiency and proficiency does have its merit. For a small company, an efficient employee can not only at play[unclear  ] when he comes into a difficult official[wrong word  ] problem, such as a mistake in the computer program[ logical confusion ], [ punctuation error ]but also induce [ unbalanced ]the whole company, thus push the whole company to come into effect to increase productivity. However, benefits to the small company cannot be said on a large corporate. Large corporate involves a complicated business system that a small company could not achieve. For example, the technical giant, Apple, manages thousands of employees and several sub-companies. Apple regards its company as a web-like system. Everyone owns their place, but would not hurt any other interests.

    Second, improving employees’ efficiency and proficiency might cause negative influence when employees lose sustenance. A mature worker who possesses a proficient skill is rare. At that time, people who become more mature will retire for a higher salary. Thus, the employee’s training can turn out to be a serious financial burden. Companies have only cost for the train but without any feedback when the training program is getting finish. It is definitely a great loss no matter whether the company is big or not. To improve the investments for a big company may not be the first choice.

    Besides, the investments in big companies can be huge when it had to do with marketing. Companies need to compete with each other by invest in many things, such as letter stocks or futures. Training employees are too much difficult than investment. The manager can sit in their office to do investment and watch other companies to bring interests for the manager’s own company.