The qualities that a person needs to become successful cannot be learned at university or in a similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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June 30, 2020 at 8:13 am
The qualities that a person needs to become successful cannot be learned at university or in a similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I tend to agree that success cannot be achieved simply through a university or a similar academic situation. It is known to all that the qualities that a person needs to get to his top career are rather complicated.
To begin with, it is important to remember that practising is the key to success. If one only own some theoretical knowledge without enough working experience, he could not obtain various qualities, such as interpersonal skills and networking skills, then he might miss his opportunity to achieve his potential.
In addition, the family life plays a significant role in the career of people as well. In the process of getting along with our family members, we would develop a strong sense of responsibility, which is particularly necessary in our occupation while cannot be learned from an academic institution. Similarly, the caring of the parents is able to cheer one up, encourging us to develop an optimistic attitude to a setback.
However, there is no deny that universities do offer us a platform to study specialised knowledge. Some people think that knowledge is the astepping-stone to success. This is true to some extent. In the changing modern society, knowledge is the best weapons to enrich ourselves and the most direct means for the administrators to choose you from a group of candicates.
All things considered, it is not difficult to find that getting access to success is quite time-consuming and laborious. It is true that some qualities could not be learned at traditional school while knowledge is the foundation of success.
June 30, 2020 at 9:52 pmScore: 54.5
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July 1, 2020 at 2:15 amI tend to agree that success cannot be achieved simply through a university or a similar academic situation. This is partly because the qualities that a person needs to get to his top career are rather complicated.
To begin with, it is important to remember that practising is the key to success. If one only has a good command of theoretical knowledge without enough working experience, he could not obtain various qualities. For example, interpersonal skills and networking skills. As a result, he might loss his opportunity to achieve his potential.
In addition, family life plays a significant role in the career of people as well. In the process of getting along with our family members, we would develop a strong sense of responsibility. That is particularly necessary in our occupation while cannot be learned from an academic institution. Similarly, the care of the parents is able to cheer one up, encouraging us to develop an optimistic attitude to a setback.
However, there is no denying that universities do offer us a platform to acquire specialised knowledge. Some people think that knowledge is the stumbling block to success. This is true to some extent. In the changing modern society, knowledge is the best weapons to enrich ourselves. Moreover, it is the most direct means for the administrators to choose you from a group of candidates.
All things considered, it is not difficult to find that approaching success is quite time-consuming and laborious. It is true that we could not learn some qualities at traditional schools while knowledge is the foundation of success.
July 1, 2020 at 10:40 pmI tend to agree that success cannot be achieved simply through [ attending ]a university or a similar academic situation.
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