The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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April 9, 2020 at 1:27 pm
The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
Consumer spending of different countries are quite different,The chart above describes the percentage of different countries’ spending on three kinds of consumer items in 2002.
Food,drinks,and tobacco accounted for the largest proportion of national consumer expenditure.The largest percentage of consumer spending was in Turkey and the number was 32.14%.It was followed by Ireland,Spain,and Italy,with 28.91%,18.80%,and 16.36% respectively.Sweden had the smallest percentage at 15.77%.
Clothing and footwear constituted the second most important consumer spening in the five countries In Sweden,it got 5.4%,which accounted for the smallest propotion of the five countries.In Italy,however,the number was 9.00%.In other three countries,the percentage were similar,which were at about6.5%.
The smallest prpotion of nation consumer expenditure was leisure and education.The figure was 4.35% in Turkey.Nevertheless,other four countries’ spending on this item were extremely lower than it in Turkey.The percentage was under 4%.
Overall, it can be said that food,drink,and tobacco were the most important consumer spending in these three items.The following were clothing and footwear.Leisure and education accounted for the smallest propotion.Meanwhile,the consumer spending of different countries are different.
April 15, 2020 at 10:31 pmScore: ungraded
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April 18, 2020 at 11:15 amThe consumer spending of different countries are different. The chart above describes the percentage of different countries’ spending on three kinds of consumer items in 2002.
Food, drinks, and tobacco accounted for the largest proportion. The maximum percentage of consumer spending was in Turkey, whose number was 32.14%. It was followed by Ireland, Spain, and Italy, with 28.91%,18.80%, and 16.36% respectively. Sweden had the smallest percentage at 15.77%.
Clothing and footwear constituted the second most important consumer spending. In Sweden, it got 5.4%, which accounted for the smallest propotion. In Italy, however, the number was 9.00%. The percentage, which were at about 6.5% was similar in other three countries.
The smallest prpotion of nation consumer expenditure was leisure and education. The figure was 4.35% in Turkey. Other four countries’ spending on this item were extremely lower. The percentage was under 4%.
Overall, it can be said that food, drink, and tobacco was the most important consumer spending of these three items. The following was clothing and footwear. Leisure and education accounted for the smallest propotion.
April 20, 2020 at 11:58 pmScore: ungraded
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April 29, 2020 at 2:59 pmInformation on consumer spending of five countries on different items in 2002
The consumer spending in different countries was different. The chart above describes the percentage of different countries’ spending，which was about three kinds of consumer items in 2002.
Food, drinks, and tobacco accounted for the largest proportion. The maximum percentage of consumer spending was in Turkey, whose number was 32.14%. It was followed by Ireland, Spain, and Italy, with 28.91%,18.80%, and 16.36% respectively. Sweden had the smallest percentage at 15.77%.
Clothing and footwear constituted the second most important consumer spending. In Sweden, it got 5.4%, which accounted for the smallest proportion. In Italy, however, the number was 9.00%. The percentage, which were at about 6.5% was similar in other three countries.
The smallest proportion of nation consumer expenditure was leisure and education. The figure was 4.35% in Turkey. Other four countries’ spending on this item was extremely lower. The percentage was under 4%.
Overall, it can be said that food, drink, and tobacco was the most important consumer spending of these three items. The following was clothing and footwear. Leisure and education accounted for the smallest proportion.
April 29, 2020 at 7:56 pmScore: 58
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Information on consumer spending of five countries on different items in 2002
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TheThis figure was/is 4.35% in Turkey. Other four countries’ spending on this item was extremely lower[ awkward writing/rephrase ] . The percentage was under 4%.Overall, it can be said that food, drink, and tobacco
was[are ] the most important consumer spending of these three items. The followingwas[ are ] clothing and footwear. Leisure and educationaccounted/account for the smallest proportion.
