The table shows information about the number of Australian people who visited the seven most popular destinations in 1999 and 2009.
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October 4, 2020 at 6:16 am
The table shows information about the number of Australian people who visited the seven most popular destinations in 1999 and 2009.
The table provides information about Australian local people visited seven popular place from 1999 to 2009.
The popular place by New Zealand was the highest ,and it increased dramatically to 1064000 number in 2009.The figure for China was much lower in 1999, and it was a slight rise to 300000 number in 2009.
Although,the Japan remained basically unchanged ,which climbing to 150000 number, the growth rate change was the biggest .United States was noticeably lower in other countries,only 33 precentage.
Overall,New Zealand is the more hot tourist attraction than other six place.All places has difference enhance during this period.
October 5, 2020 at 3:32 amScore: 42.2
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