The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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  • glorious
    University: Hunan city university
    Nationality: Chinese
    October 27, 2020 at 1:54 pm

    The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1965, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

    The three pie charts are the illustration of what vehicles are used in the UK in three separate years, 1965,1985 and 2005.

    In 2005, the most popular traffic tools are private cars (60%), as can be seen in other years (1965, 1985), private cars accounts for 40% and 55% receptively. It is remarked that public transport comes second both in 1965 and 2005 among these ways of transportation. By contrast, recreational vehicles are the least flavored by people, not surpassing 10% in 1985 and 2005.Besides, such vehicles in 1965 are three times as many as those in 1985.

    With roughly the same number, except the private cars, three items have no huge difference in 1965. The percentage of Lorries and other commercial vehicles are equal to that of public transport in 1985.The remaining 18% of vehicles were approximately evenly allotted to the rest two tasks, Lorries and other commercial vehicles and recreational vehicles.

    Overall, the different tools in traveling varied dramatically.

    October 27, 2020 at 7:55 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 70% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

    glorious
    University: Hunan city university
    Nationality: Chinese
    October 30, 2020 at 2:11 pm

    Thank you very much!

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