More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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  • zhangshaofei
    University: TianJin University
    Nationality: China
    April 22, 2020 at 7:36 am

    More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, so there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    It seems that electric device is gradually becoming the dominate method for people to get information they need in this big data era. While that doesn’t mean printed publication is useless.

    There are many features of printed publication that those electric devices cannot provide, for example, eyesight protection. As we all know, if we have good reading habits, for example, having a piece of break after a long time reading, we are able to keep our eyesight in health situation. While the things are different for electric devices. According to the research conclusion drawn by Peking University in 2019, no matter what measure people take to protect their eyesight, as long as they spend a lot of time staring at screens, and no matter how big those screens are, the light emit from screens will destroy people’s eyesight to different extent. Considering that, for the majority of children and grey citizen, the printed publication is preferable.

    Besides, printed publication is more safe and reliable. As we can see, in this era, information showed on screen may be easily misrepresented by people who want to get illegal profits, which means, there are a large amount of fake news sent to people every single day. in this big data era, information criminals have easy access to disseminate fake information which will easily jeopardize the society’s stable and peace. And the public will misconceive and do something harmful to the whole society. For example, these days people disseminate through internet that many famous specialists agree that Banlangen, a kind of Chinese herb, is very useful for the new coronavirus. This fake news caused people crowd to buy it, making the society disordered. While for printed publication, there is a strict censorship system, the information published on those is reliable.

    All in all, as long as I can see, there are many significant features of printed publication cannot be simulated by electric devices. So even those electric devices play an increasing important role in this era, those printed books and newspapers are also mean a lot for us.

    April 22, 2020 at 8:57 pm

    Score: ungraded

    Issues:

    1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
    2. About 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

    I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.