TPO 33 independent writing
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October 17, 2021 at 4:15 pm
According to the reading material, three theories are attempting to explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls, while the lecturer considers none of them is convincing, contradicting them by using specific reasons.
To begin with, the first theory consists that the balls are weapons that used for hunting and fighting because of the grooves and holes on them. However, the speaker explains that common weapons like arrows are likely to be cracked, but the stone balls are well-preserved, showing that they are impossible to be weapons.
Secondly, because of the uniformity in size, a theory demonstrates that the carved stone ball may represent specific unit, and be used to weigh things. On the contrary, the speaker strongly contradicts the theory by stating that the materials of the stone balls are different. They have different density therefore the weight of the balls are also various, making it impossible for the weighing function.
The last theory, by pointing out the elaborate designs on the ball, indicates the social use of the stone balls, specifically, representing the status of a person. In contrast, the lecturer considers the design on the balls are too simple to showing the status of a high-class person. In addition, the graves of the high-ranking persons, which always contain the possessions they had to show their power and status, do not include the carved balls.
October 18, 2021 at 9:26 amAccording to the reading material, three theories are attempting (verb form error) to explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls, (split into second sentence) while the lecturer considers none of them is (delete) convincing, contradicting them by using specific reasons (rewrite the “second” sentence).
To begin with, (delete) the first theory consists (word choice error) that the balls are weapons that (delete) used for hunting and fighting because of the grooves and holes on them (simplify). However, the speaker explains that common weapons like arrows are likely to be cracked, but the stone balls are well-preserved, showing that they are impossible to be weapons.
Secondly, because of the uniformity in size, a theory demonstrates that the carved stone ball may represent (missing article) specific unit, and be used to weigh things. On the contrary, the speaker strongly contradicts the theory by stating that the materials of the stone balls are different. They have different density therefore the weight of the balls are also various, making it impossible for the weighing function.
The last theory, by pointing out the elaborate designs on the ball, indicates the social use of the stone balls, specifically, representing the status of a person. In contrast, the lecturer considers the design on the balls are too simple to showing (verb form error) the status of a high-class person. In addition, the graves of the high-ranking persons, which always contain the possessions they had to show their power and status, do not include the carved balls.
October 18, 2021 at 9:26 amPartial Revision (please fix similar errors, revise whole essay, and resubmit)
October 18, 2021 at 12:40 pmAccording to the reading material, three theories attempt to explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls. At the same time, the lecturer, contradicting them by using specific reasons, considers none of them convincing.
The first theory indicates that the balls are weapons used for hunting and fighting because of the grooves and holes. However, the speaker explains that common weapons like arrows are likely to be cracked, but the stone balls are well-preserved, showing that they are impossible to be weapons.
Secondly, because of the uniformity in size, a theory demonstrates that the carved stone ball may represent a specific unit, and be used to weigh things. On the contrary, the speaker strongly contradicts the theory by stating that the materials of the stone balls are different. They have different density therefore the weight of the balls are also various, making it impossible for the weighing function.
The last theory, by pointing out the elaborate designs on the ball, indicates the social use of the stone balls, specifically, representing the status of a person. In contrast, the lecturer considers the design on the balls are too simple to show the status of a high-class person. In addition, the graves of the high-ranking persons, which always contain the possessions they had to show their power and status, do not include the carved balls.
October 18, 2021 at 3:26 pmAccording to the reading material, three theories attempt to explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls. At the same time, the lecturer, contradicting them by using specific reasons, considers none of them convincing.
The first theory indicates that the balls are weapons used for hunting and fighting because of the grooves and holes. However, the speaker explains that common weapons like arrows are likely to be cracked, but the stone balls are well-preserved, showing that they are impossible to be weapons.
Secondly, because of the uniformity in size, a theory demonstrates that the carved stone ball may represent a specific unit, and be used to weigh things. On the contrary, the speaker strongly contradicts the theory by stating that the materials of the stone balls are different. They have different density therefore the weight of the balls are also various, making it impossible for the weighing function.
The last theory, by pointing out the elaborate designs on the ball, indicates the social use of the stone balls, specifically, representing the status of a person. In contrast, the lecturer considers the design on the balls are too simple to show the status of a high-class person. In addition, the graves of the high-ranking persons, which always contain the possessions they had to show their power and status, do not include the carved balls.
October 18, 2021 at 3:29 pmPlease fix the issues indicated on the screenshot reviews.
October 21, 2021 at 11:55 amAccording to the reading material, three theories attempt to explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls. At the same time, the lecturer, contradicting them by using specific reasons, considers none of them convincing.
The first theory indicates that the balls are weapons used for hunting and fighting because of the grooves and holes. However, the speaker explains that some common weapons like arrows are likely to be cracked, but the stone balls are well-preserved, showing that they are impossible to be weapons.
Secondly, because of the uniformity in size, a theory demonstrates that the carved stone ball may represent a specific unit, and be used to weigh things. On the contrary, the speaker strongly contradicts the statement by stating that the materials of the stone balls are different. They have different densities, therefore, the weights of the balls are also various, making it impossible for the weighing function.
The last theory, pointing out the elaborate designs on the ball, indicates the social use of the stone balls, specifically, representing the status of a person. In contrast, the lecturer considers the design on the balls is too simple to show the status of a high-class person. In addition, the graves of the high-ranking persons, which always contain the possessions they had to show their power and status, do not include the carved balls.
October 21, 2021 at 1:02 pmAccording to the reading material, three theories attempt to explain the purpose and meaning of the carved stone balls. At the same time, the lecturer, contradicting them by (delete) using specific reasons, considers none of them convincing.
The first theory indicates that the balls are weapons used for hunting and fighting because of the grooves and holes. However, the speaker (lecturer) explains that some common weapons like arrows are likely to be cracked (crack), but the stone balls are well-preserved, showing that they are impossible to (cannot) be weapons.
Secondly, because of the uniformity in size, a (another) theory demonstrates (argues) that the carved stone ball may represent a specific unit, and be used to weigh things. On the contrary, (delete) the speaker strongly contradicts the statement by stating (arguing) that the materials of the stone balls are different. They have different densities, therefore, the weights of the balls are also various, making it impossible for the weighing function (for it to be used to weigh objects).
The last theory, pointing (points) out the elaborate designs on the ball, indicates (indicating) the social use of the stone balls, specifically, representing (to represent) the status of a person. In contrast, the lecturer considers the design on the balls is (delete) too simple to show the status of a high-class person. In addition, the graves of the (delete) high-ranking persons, which always contain the (delete) possessions they had to show their power and status, do not include the carved balls.
October 21, 2021 at 4:21 pmFinal Revision
