TPO 40 Integrated Writing: Venus is unsuitable for humans to live
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October 29, 2019 at 4:09 pm
TOEFL Writing Topic: TPO 40 Integrated Writing: Venus is unsuitable for humans to live.
The author of the reading lists three reasons to prove that Venus is unsuitable for humans to live, whereas the professor gives his perspective reasons to contradicts all the points.
As opposed to the author’s idea, the professor states that a floating station can solve the problem of high pressure. To be more specific, since the higher altitude, the less pressure, pressure of the 50-kilometer-height-station on Venus will be the same as it on the earth’s surface, thus there is no danger for being crashed on the Venus. As a result, the claim in the reading that humans cannot land on Venus because of high pressure is unconvincing.
Moreover, the author contends that there is no reservoir water on Venus. The professor discredits it by arguing that water can be made by chemical materials. In detail, there are abundant materials like carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid which can be used to make water and oxygen, so it is possible that humans can survive on Venus by these products of chemistry.
Finally, the professor also represents his idea that floating stations can use sunlight as solar power. As the station floats at 50km height where the cloud is not thick, so some part of sunlight can get through the upper cloud, and some part of sunlight will be reflected by the lower cloud, therefore, both the direct and reflected sunlight can be used as solar power to produce enough electricity for machines and equipment.
November 1, 2019 at 2:06 amTOEFL Writing Topic: TPO 40 Integrated Writing: Venus is unsuitable for humans to live.
Score: 58.3
The author of the/this reading lists three reasons to prove that Venus is unsuitable for humans to live, whereas the professor gives his perspective reasons to contradicts[ grammatical errors ] all the points[logical confusion/whose points? ] .
As opposed to the author’s idea, the professor states that a floating station can solve the problem of high pressure. To be
morespecific, since the higher altitude[ grammatical error/is ] , the less pressure[ grammatical error ] , [article error ] pressure of the 50-kilometer-height-station on Venus will[ tense error/is/could ] be the same as it [ grammatical error/it is ] on the earth’s surface, [ punctuation error] thus there is no danger for being crashed on the Venus. As a result, the claim in the reading that humans cannot land on Venus because of high pressure is unconvincing.Moreover, the author contends that there is no reservoir [ preposition error/of] water on Venus. The professor discredits it [ unclear pronoun/use specific noun ] by arguing that water can be made by/from the reaction(s) of chemical materials. In detail, there are abundant materials like carbon dioxide, nitrogen and sulfuric acid which/that can be used to make water and oxygen, so it is possible that humans can survive on Venus by
these products of chemistrythrough the reactions of these chemicals.Finally, the professor also represents his idea that floating stations can use sunlight as solar power. As the station floats at 50km height where the cloud is not thick,
so[ grammatical error] some part of sunlight can get through the upper cloud, and some part of sunlight will be reflected by the lower cloud, [ punctuation error ] therefore, both the direct and reflected sunlight can be used as solar power to produce enough electricity for running machines and equipment.
