The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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April 18, 2020 at 8:28 am
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show the layout of the road access to a city hospital form 2007 to 2010.
Overall, it is evident that the car park was divided in public area and staff area, while some new infrastructures were bulit.
In 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by Ring Road, with the vertical Hospital Road below it. The City Road layed through the Hospital Road, which made them a cross. Six bus stops located in both left and right of Hospital Road. A car park for staff and public located in the north of City Road and east of Hospital Road.
In 2010, some changes happened and most located in the south of the map. The bus stops were removed and a big bus station replaced them. It was in the west of Hospital Road. The original car park became the staff car park, the public car park was converted to the east of Ring Road. What’s more, two roundabout were built in the Hospital Road. One was in the junction of Ring Road and Hospital Road, another was in the junction of City Road and Hospital Road. They all connected to the bust station.
April 21, 2020 at 12:09 amScore: Ungraded
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April 21, 2020 at 4:33 amThe two maps show the layout of the road access to a city hospital form 2007 to 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the car park was divided in public and staff areas and some new infrastructures were built beside the roads.
In 2007, Ring Road surrounded the city hospital, with the vertical Hospital Road below it. City Road was through the Hospital Road, which made them cross. Six bus stops located on both left and right of Hospital Road. A car park for staff and public located in the north of City Road and east of Hospital Road.
In 2010, some changes happened and most located in the south of the map. The six bus stops disappeared, and a big bus station replaced them. It was in the west of Hospital Road. The original car park became the staff car park while the public car park moved to the east of Ring Road. What’s more, two roundabouts were built on the Hospital Road. One was on the cross of Ring Road and Hospital Road and the other was on the cross of City Road and Hospital Road. They all connected to the bus station.
April 21, 2020 at 3:23 pmThe two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Score: ungraded
Final Revision
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Overall, it is clear that the car park was divided in [article error ]public and [article error ]staff area
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April 22, 2020 at 2:20 amThe two maps show the layouts of the road access to a city hospital from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the car park was divided in the public and the staff area, and some new infrastructures were built beside the roads.
In 2007, Ring Road surrounded the city hospital, with the vertical Hospital Road below Ring Road. The City Road crossed the Hospital Road. In the same year, Six bus stops located on both the left and the right of the Hospital Road. A car park for the staff and the public located in the north of the City Road and the east of the Hospital Road.
In 2010, some changes happened, and most changes took place near the Hospital Road. At the same time, the six bus stops disappeared, and a big bus station replaced them. The bus station was built on the west of the Hospital Road. Meanwhile, the original car park became the staff car park while the public car park was moved to the east of the Ring Road. What’s more, two roundabouts were built on the Hospital Road. One was on the cross of the Ring Road, and the Hospital Road and the other was on the cross of the City Road and the Hospital Road. These two roads all connected with the bus station.
April 22, 2020 at 2:22 amIt was already ‘final revision.’
