We can learn about a person from the books and movies that a person likes.

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Issues:

1. Repetitive words – vary word choice more
2. Pronoun errors
3. Article errors
4. Subject-verb agreement errors
5. Preposition errors

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As social animals, we could hardly live a day without communicating with others. To maintain a good relationship with other [the  ] people around us, we need to know them. Somebody thinks we can learn about a person from the books and movies that person likes. However, I disagree with the statement. In my opinion, it[ unclear pronoun ] ’s[ informal ] not an effective way to learn about[repetition  ] a person.

Admittedly, from the types of books and movies a person usually chooses, [ punctuation error ] we know his or her preferences. Maybe the preferences can reflect a person’s personality, but it[ unclear pronoun ] ’s limited and superficial. We can’t judge somebody is [ grammatical error ] humorous through to[  grammatical error] his favorite movies that are comedies. Therefore, I don’t think I can get some valuable references[ word form error ] from [  wrong preposition] this way.

First of all, everyone has so many types of preferences[absolute statement  ] that we couldn’t learn about them (simply and accurately)[ unclear ] . As for me, I like many movies in [ wrong preposition ] different types. I like comedy that lets me recover from depression. (I like action movies because I enjoy the excitement from my body’s adrenaline and heartbeat driving up)[unclear/rephrase  ] . I like [article error  ] affectional film because I can sense the love then comfort me (who has weak emotional life)[ rephrase to simplify ] . (One type of movie is one side of my character)[ unclear/logically disconnected from the last sentence ] . Neither books nor movies can reflect all of me.

In addition, (somebody liking any type of book and movie has different reasons)[ confusing/grammatical error ] . When I (got into)[use formal writing  ] high school, I met a girl with long hair, was in the corner[ grammatical error ] , quietly reading a book. Then[word choice  ] it’s her turn to introduce herself, she said she loved (watching movies with depression)[unclear  ] . All that made me think she’s kind of [ use formal writing ] a lonely and dissocial person. To my surprise, she was outgoing and dynamic[ word choice ] in the[article error  ] interaction and activities. We became good friends until now. One day I asked her why she l(oved the movies with depression)[ unclear ] . She said she was enthusiastic about embracing life from the movies[ unclear/rephrase ] .

To sum up, people have plenty of types of favorite movies and books[ absolute statement ] , [ grammatical error ] different reasons to like them[ unclear pronoun ] . That’s why I disagree [grammatical error  ] the statement that we can learn about a person from the books and movies that person likes.

As social animals, we could hardly live a day without communicating with others. To maintain a good relationship with the other people around us, we need to know them. Somebody thinks we can learn about a person from the books and movies that person likes. However, I disagree with the statement.

Admittedly, we know [absolute statement – use conditional writing  ] his or her[unclear pronoun  ] preferences from the types of books and movies a person usually chooses. Maybe the[article error  ] preferences can reflect a person’s personality, but the way limited and superficial[ grammatical error ] . We can’t judge somebody is humorous through to[ grammatical error ] his favorite movies that are comedies. Therefore, I don’t think I can get some valuable reference (by this way)[ unclear ] .

First, most of [preposition or article error  ] people have so many types of preferences that we couldn’t learn about them (simply and accurately)[ unclear ] . For example, I like different types of movies. I like comedy that lets me recover from depression. I like action movies that I can get the [article error  ] excitement from heartbeat driving up. I like [article error  ] affectional film because the love it conveys can comfort sensitive me. One type of movie is one side of my character. Action movies reflect my passion, [ punctuation error ] comedy reflects my joy. Neither books nor movies can reflect all of me.

In addition, (like a certain type of movies or books do not)[grammatical error  ] mean that he or she has the[article error  ] same type of personality. When I was in high school, I met a girl with long hair, (sat in the corner)[ unclear ] , quietly reading a book. After it’s her turn to introduce herself, she said she loved (watching movies with depression)[confusing  ] . All that made me think she’s a little lonely and dissocial person. To my surprise, she was outgoing in interaction and activities. We became good friends until now. One day I asked her why she loved (the depressed)[word form error  ] movies. She said she was enthusiastic about embracing life from the movies. Then I knew it’s superficial [ wrong word ]  to judge a person (through to)[ grammatical error ] his or her favorite movies or books.

To sum up, most of [ preposition error ] people have plenty of types of favorite movies [ punctuation error ] and books and the type of movies or books do not mean that they have the same type of personality. That’s why I disagree [preposition error  ] the statement that we can learn about a person from the books and movies that person likes[ duplicating the topic ] .