Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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  • Carlisle
    University: Chongqing University
    Nationality: People's Republic of China
    April 15, 2020 at 2:30 pm

    Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

    With the continuous change of the dominance of species, humans have always regarded themselves as the overlord of the earth, excluding other animals. Nevertheless, I absolutely scowl at this point of opinion. Consequently, humans have experienced an unpleasant consequence for this, taking novel coronavirus disease is a characteristic example.

    First and foremost, there are a host of rooms for us to coexist side by side with wild animals, and it may as well be our intention. Whereas, on no account can we ignore the value of these conditions for humankind’s flourishing. An advantage of wildlife protection is that humanity and animals produce carbon dioxide, the rainforests absorb it, releasing oxygen, and stabilizing the Earth’s climate as well. Furthermore, the most crucial business is that the indiscriminate devastation of wildlife environments and the killing of wildlife for food has led to various global pandemics, such as the Spanish pandemic, the Black Death, SARS, MERS, Ebola and current COVID-19, which are all the whimsical consequences of the whims of humanity. Thence, that‘s the reason why the human race and nature get along harmoniously is essential.

    In summary, providing that we strive to protect wild animals, the first affair is to stop indiscriminate hunting and killing, which can not only prevent the spread of the epidemic, but also prevent the emergence of new viruses. Certainly, we should step up publicity efforts to conserve organisms, inform individuals from all walks of life that we are one with nature, which means governments in any country should establish a saturator or shelter for wild animals or enforce great measures to protect the wilderness.

    In conclusion, it is critical to spare no effort to cope with the relationship between humans and wild animals.

    April 16, 2020 at 1:03 am

    Score: 44.9

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