Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

I fundamentally agree with the author’s opinion, which is that people should chase more valuable and meaningful goals instead of only focusing on fame or money at an early age. (This passage will demonstrate this opinion)[  use your own words to write ] mainly from the function of long-term goals and the harm of instant targets.

The primary reason why I agree with the writer is that realistic goals help people more in the long term. If a person only grabs [ grammatical error / subjunctive  ]the rabbit that accidentally pops in front of his eyes, he will[ grammatical error  ] never try to learn how to hunt one. However, rabbits do not always run into their own deaths. Without real hunting skills, a hunter would never get enough food to feed himself. One can be lucky for one time, but not ten times. Attaching too much attention to obtaining a fast-coming outcome is going to bring you neither( quantity nor quality)[unclear   ]. Meanwhile, learning how to hunt a rabbit with one’s skills and wisdom can guarantee a hunter has food constantly. Compared to waiting for the rabbit to get stupid once in a while, knowing how to set a trap to capture rabbits is absolutely a far more reliable way to make sure one will not starve to death.[ The whole paragraph is irrelevant. Use an analogy as concise as you can. No need to elaborate on it.  ]

Another significant issue is[  that ] fame or money that comes in all of a sudden would probably ruin one’s life. As is universally acknowledged, a job that acquires money too fast is usually not a secured one.[ sweeping statement  ] Nowadays, many teenagers are so desperate to become movie stars or popular singers that their attention is all drawn to clothes and makeup. At the same time, they inevitably neglect the skill that can benefit their whole life—the courses they should be taking. However, time never waits for anyone. When these juveniles get older and realize they need sturdy[word choice issue   ] ability to earn their own bread, they have lost their youth and can never go back to school again. These people can only end up living on a little financial aid from the government[sweeping statement   ]. To avoid this kind of tragedy from happening, people should ( more about interest )[ unclear  ]in the long run.

Although getting too addicted to pursuing immediate fame and recognition is not good for young people, it is not all useless. Since young people are not always that far-sighted,[ sweeping statement  ] sometimes, chasing proper recognition can play as a helpful motivation. With these short-term prizes set, young people would prefer to study hard to obtain them rather than (studying with no apparent gain)[ unclear  ]. In fact, during this learning process, the teens have already learned the most important part, which is the (skills themselves)[ unclear  ].

To sum up, for young people, goals with realistic meanings (are always supposed to be put into the priory position)[unnecessary passive   ]. Otherwise, only concentrating on immediate benefits would make them regret for the rest of their life.