Your professor has assigned the class a final project. However, each student is free to choose who they work with. If you had to work on this kind of project, would you rather: – Work alone – Work with classmates – Work with a tutor. Provide reasons and examples to support your response.

[Article error   ]Final year project is an important assignment for every student in the university, which is highly relevant to the [ article error  ]graduation. When dealing with (the problem in the process)[ unclear  ], people[  shift of person ] either seek help from others or solve them[unclear pronoun   ] by themselves. In my opinion, (I would like to work)[redundant   ] [ working  ]with my classmates when[ /after  ] professor assign [grammatical error   ]a project because it will be (more efficient and easier to cooperate with others.)[ unclear  ]

Firstly, (it is efficient to)[ redundant  ] finish a task with the[article error   ] help of [ from  ]classmates. Working with classmate[ word form error  ] will [ tense error  ]have less pressure than with a tutor because (we are all at the same level)[ unclear  ].[ punctuation error with coordinating conjunction  ] And it[unclear pronoun   ] will be easier to ask my classmates to help me than a tutor. I remember once I [ once  ]worked in the[article error   ] lab with my classmates together[  redundant ] to do some experiments on editing phages. I met some serious problems when I cultured the cell, and I only would waste all the cells if I couldn’t solve them immediately. Luckily, one of my classmates who knew how to deal[ preposition error  ] these problems well helped me. Finally, [ and  ]we finished [ /completed  ]the experiments on time without wasting anything[the cells   ].

Furthermore, (some useful suggestions will come up when working with people together)[ gregarious work can also help to generate viable suggestions  ]. In a group, [Since   ]everyone has their own advantages and disadvantages. Sometimes people may overlook their mistakes in their work. With the help of other we can avoid [, group work can prevent people from making   ]some mistakes[, thereby helping them to   ] and finish the work better. For example, I once worked in a group [ to summarize final experimental results for poster presentation.  ] to finish a scientific poster. I was assigned to write the result part. After finishing writing, I sent it[ unclear pronoun  ] to my groupmates. [choppy sentence   ]One of my groupmates was perfectly good at English. [ choppy sentence  ]She checked my grammar mistakes and [  then ]gave me suggestions on how to revise them. I was really grateful to her advice. Without her help, I wouldn’t get [ article error  ]high grade in the end.

In conclusion, working with classmate[word form or article error   ] in the final project will have many benefits. Not only your[shift of person   ] work can[ grammatical error  ] be completed more efficiently, but also you will harvest more precious advice to better polish [ burnish  ]your work.

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The final year project is an essential assignment[matters  ] for every university student, which is [ since it remains ]highly relevant to graduation. (When dealing with the problem encountered)[ unclear ], people[students  ] either seek help from others or solve difficulties by themselves. In my opinion, working with my classmates after the professor assigns a [on this assigned  ]project (will)[grammatical error/zero conditional  ] be more efficient.

Firstly, finishing a task with help from classmates is efficient.[ repetition/rewrite it ] Working with classmates has less pressure than with a tutor because (getting help from my classmates is more accessible than a tutor)[confusion  ]. I once worked in a lab with my classmates together[ redundant ] on editing phages. I met some [, and I encountered  ]serious problems when I cultured [ while culturing ]the cell, and [.  ]I only would waste all the cells if I couldn’t solve them[unclear pronoun  ] immediately. Luckily, one of my classmates who knew how to deal with these problems well [ daggling/ can be deal with problems well or well helped ]helped me. In the end, we completed the experiments on time without wasting the cells. Even though I could seek help from tutors, tutors are[inconsistent in tense  ] always busy with their schedules, which[unclear pronoun  ] I might not receive a reply quickly. Therefore, asking for help from classmates will[tense error  ] be an efficient way to finish the project.

Furthermore, g[ G ]regarious work can also help to generate viable suggestions[/solutions  ]. Since everyone has their advantages and disadvantages, group work can prevent people from making mistakes, thereby helping them finish the work [ with ]better [ results ]. For example, I once worked in a group to summarize final experimental results for a term paper. After finishing writing, [After completing the draft,  ]I sent my part to my groupmates. One of my groupmates, who specialized in English, checked my grammar mistakes and then gave me suggestions on revising them[unclear pronoun  ]. Without her help, I wouldn’t get a high grade in the end. (Therefore, we could also learn from a final project with classmates that we should learn from each other’s strengths to offset our shortness.)[unclear/grammatical error  ]

In conclusion, working with classmates in[ on ] the final project will[tense error  ] have many benefits. Not only can the work be completed[ unnecessary passive ] more efficiently, but also you[ shift in person ] will[ unparalleled verb ] harvest more precious advice to burnish your[ shift in person ] work.