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April 13, 2019 at 2:54 pm
SCORE
56.3
PROBLEMS
- A large number of sentences exceeds 20 words;
- A large number of grammatical errors;
- Excessive use of passive-voice sentences (reduce to less than 5%);
- Excessive use of adverbs (either remove unnecessary adverbs or substitute them with forceful verbs);
- Convention errors (check sentence spacing);
- Vocabulary/Variety (avoid using the same words/expressions)
GOOD POINTS
- Sentence flow: Great!
- Paragraph Lenth: Great!
- Transition Words: Great
Please rewrite and re-upload your essay.
Best wishes,
Lin Qiu
April 13, 2019 at 2:40 pmReport from WritersForMe.com
SCORE
62.3
PROBLEMS
- A large number of sentences exceeds 20 words;
- Excessive use of passive-voice sentences (reduce to less than 5%);
- Excessive use of adverbs (either remove unnecessary adverbs or substitute them with forceful verbs);
- Convention errors (check sentence spacing);
- Punctuation errors (check online how to use comma and semicolon within a sentence or between sentences/clauses)
- Vocabulary limitations (avoid using same words/expressions)
GOOD POINTS
- Sentence flow: Great!
- Paragraph Lenth: Great!
- Transition Words: Great
You need to rewrite and re-upload your essay.
Best wishes,
Lin Qiu
April 11, 2019 at 5:32 pmScore: 50.7 (Good job!) Try to score 53+.
You need to rewrite your essay to address the problem below.
Problems (1)
Sentence length: 38.9% of the sentences contain more than 20 words, which is more than the recommended maximum of 20%. Try to shorten the sentences to 20 words (preferably 15 words for most sentences).
Good results (4)
Passive voice: You’re using enough active voice. That’s great!
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Transition words: Well done!
April 11, 2019 at 5:22 pmScore: 52.5 (This is already a very good score; from 50, one improvement can raise the score between 0.1 and 0.4)
Problems (1)
Sentence length: 30% of the sentences contain more than 20 words, which is more than the recommended maximum of 25%. Try to shorten the sentences.
Good results (4)
Passive voice: You’re using enough active voice. That’s great!
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Transition words: Well done!
April 11, 2019 at 5:16 pmProblems (3)
The copy scores 49.8 in the test, which is considered difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences, using less difficult words to improve readability.
Passive voice: 16.7% of the sentences contain passive voice, which is more than the recommended maximum of 10%. Try to use their active counterparts.
Reduce the number of adverbs; try to use forceful verbs instead.
Good results (4)
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Sentence length: Great!
Transition words: Well done!
April 11, 2019 at 5:03 pmThe essay scores 15 in our grading system, which is considered very difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences, using less difficult words to improve readability.
Passive voice: about 30% of the sentences contain passive voice, which is more than the recommended maximum of 10%. Try to use their active counterparts.
Sentence length: most of the sentences contain more than 20 words, which is more than the recommended maximum of 20%. Try to shorten the sentences.
Good results (3)
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Transition words: Well done!
April 11, 2019 at 3:52 amHi, below is your edited essay.
https://writersforme.com/ticeayia-essay-20190410/
Best wishes,
Lin Qiu
April 10, 2019 at 10:36 pmProblems (2)
This essay scores 49.5 in the test, which is considered difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences, using less difficult words to improve readability.
Passive voice: 22.2% of the sentences contain passive voice, which is more than the recommended maximum of 10%. Try to use their active counterparts.
Many articles “the” should be removed.
Good results (4)
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Sentence length: Great!
Transition words: Well done!
April 10, 2019 at 10:26 pmProblems (3)
Passive voice: 15.8% of the sentences contain passive voice, which is more than the recommended maximum of 10%. Try to use their active counterparts.
Sentence length: 31.6% of the sentences contain more than 20 words, which is more than the recommended maximum of 25%. Try to shorten the sentences to 20 words, preferably 15 words.
Plagiarized content (i.e. Some people suggest that…as far as I am concerned…) significantly reduced the score.
Improvements (1)
The copy scores 52 in the test, which is considered fairly difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences to improve readability.
Good results (3)
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Transition words: Well done!
April 10, 2019 at 10:13 pmProblems (1)
This essay scores 38.1 in the test, changing repetitive words can significantly increase your score. (i.e. universities – academic institutions; students – young learners)
Good results (6)
Passive voice: You’re using enough active voice. That’s great!
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Sentence length: Great!
Transition words: Well done!
April 10, 2019 at 3:52 amProblems (3)
The essay scores 47.2 in the test, which is considered very difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences, using less difficult words to improve readability.
Passive voice: 27.6% of the sentences contain passive voice, which is more than the recommended maximum of 10%. Try to use their active counterparts.
Limit your essay to 320 words.
Good results (4)
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Transition words: Well done!
April 10, 2019 at 3:42 amThis essay scores 51.2 in the test, which is considered fairly difficult to read. Try to make shorter sentences to improve readability.
Problems (4)
Passive voice: 16.7% of the sentences contain passive voice, which is more than the recommended maximum of 10%. Try to use their active counterparts.
Sentence length: 44.4% of the sentences contain more than 20 words, which is more than the recommended maximum of 25%. Try to shorten the sentences (optimally to -15 words for most sentences).
Avoid repeating words.
Limit your essay to 320 words in rewriting it.
Good results (3)
Consecutive sentences: There is enough variety in your sentences. That’s great!
Paragraph length: None of the paragraphs are too long. Great job!
Transition words: Well done!
Best wishes,
Lin Qiu
April 10, 2019 at 3:32 amIn general, I recommend International Commercial Law for Chinese LLM applicants.
It is broadly accepted that it takes at least forty years for a legal system (including courts, laws, judges, and attorneys., etc) to mature provided there would be no significant hindrance. As such, it would be foolish to focus on studies of a specific law category that is deprived of such a chance.
Additionally, some law branches such as Immigration Law are being increasingly eaten up by Big Four Accounting firms, thereby driving down lawyers’ income significantly.
On the other hand, more than 50% of international commercial disputes involve companies/organizations from emerging economies such as China, and more than 70% of legal professionals are from the USA + UK, so a lawyer with Chinese linguistic and legal background is destined to have a promising career prospect.
April 9, 2019 at 3:37 pmHi, below is your edited essay.
https://writersforme.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/04/20190408-edit.pdf
Best wishes,
Lin Qiu
April 9, 2019 at 3:29 pm
