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Hi, you need to shorten your essay to 320 words.
Score: 58.2
You need to resolve these issues in relation to your essay.
- Shorten/split most sentences exceeding 20 words;
- Restrict each paragraph within 85 words.
I will send you screenshots illustrating errors/problems of your essay. Revise your essay accordingly and then re-submit your essay.
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Below are the notes I shared with several students. Read them:
Notes:
- All of the prompts are from former TOEFL exams.
- The information available online, i.e., Google search results, is either misleading or wrong relative to length: [an organization] states independent essays should be between 280-320 words. More words than needed is equivalent to more opportunities to make a mistake. Students should be informed re: word count, i.e., MORE WORDS does not mean a higher score.
- Information concerning paragraphs/content available from [a TOEFL training school], etc. is also wrong: the number of paragraphs is irrelevant and the only important issue re: content is to RESPOND DIRECTLY to the prompt, i.e., the raters/software doesn’t care about structure or content except the latter must Make sense and Must directly respond to the prompt [to preclude prepared essays].
- UK usage/spelling is entirely acceptable.
- AVOID complex grammar; avoid ‘Chinese English’ usage; 5 tenses: present, past, future, present perfect [have done/has been], and conditional [would go/could do it] are OPTIMAL.
- Don’t rewrite the prompt in the first paragraph of your essay…it’s okay to paraphrase [use words that mean the same thing].
- Recent TOEFL change…students found test takes too long, so there are fewer multiple-choice questions, i.e., essays are now more heavily ‘weighted’]
Score: 75.2
I will send you screenshots illustrate issues/errors concerning your essay.
Regards,
Lin Qiu
Here is the answer:
https://personalstatement101.com/how-to-write-cv-for-hkust-msc-in-accounting-program/
Regards,
Lin Qiu
Hi, please find my video analysis on your CV below:
https://personalstatement101.com/how-to-write-cv-for-cambridge-mast-in-physics-program/
Sure. Either submit your CV to this forum or contact me via WeChat.
Regards,
Lin Qiu
Score: 41.8
You need to improve your essay by addressing the following problems:
- Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words;
- Avoid errors in conventions and spacing.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate the problems/errors.
Score: 69
You need to improve your essay by addressing the following problems:
- Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate the problems/errors.
Score: 59.2
You need to improve your essay by addressing the following problems:
- Shorten/split sentences exceeding 20 words;
- Restrict each paragraph to 85 words;
- Convert most passive sentences into their active counterparts.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate the problems/errors.
Hi, please check the link below to learn how to revise your CV.
https://personalstatement101.com/cv-for-solid-mechanics-phd-program/
Regards,
Lin Qiu
Score: 38.5
Most of the sentences exceed 20 words, so split or simply these sentences. I will send you screenshots to illustrate problems/errors concerning your essay.
Regards,
Lin Qiu
Score: 69.7
I will get back to you with the final revision shortly.
Regards,
Lin Qiu
Score: 62.5
Many sentences exceed 20 words, so please split or shorten these sentences. Additionally, there is a large number of passive sentences, so convert them into their active counterparts.
I will send you screenshots to illustrate errors/problems in relation to your essay.
Regards,
Lin Qiu