Score: ungraded

Issues:

1. Nearly 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. Convert passive sentences into their active counterparts.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

Score: ungraded

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

Score: 62.5

Mastering a second language is a (necessary step) [ unclear]for many students, and some are convinced that children should start learning languages in primary school. Though this arrangement may cause some problems, I still think it can provide a firm foundation for their[unclear pronoun ] development.

(The first advantage)[ unclear] is that young children pick up languages more effortless [ grammatical error]than teenagers. Most linguists believe there is a critical period for humans to acquire language, as at that time their [unclear ]brains facilitate the entire process[unclear ]. In contrast, people who have missed out on this crucial chance (will have difficulty) [absolute writing ] in learning languages. For example, they may fail to understand grammar, remember vocabulary or imitate the accent of native speakers

Next, the curriculum in primary school is more flexible than [lack a comparison ]in secondary school. [ lack connection from the prior sentence]Students will absorb tremendous knowledge as soon as they enter secondary school. Thus, they may spend less time learning languages. For instance, Chinese students have to spend a massive amount of time to study new subjects, such as physics, chemistry, biology, as well as homework[imbalanced concept ]. In this case, their exposure to foreign languages will be insufficient, a factor which may cause a failure to acquire[grammatical error ] a new language.

On the other hand, learning another language too early may result in some issues[unclear ]. [ lack connection]It[ unclear pronoun] may burden well-off families. [ lack connection]Some people can employ (personal English teachers) [ unclear] to help their sons or daughters, but deprived families cannot afford this service. Even if they (engage one)[ unclear], it [unclear pronoun ]would be an extra and heavy expenditure, [ punctuation error]because people who live on a tight budget will not[ absolute writing] go aboard and use foreign languages.

In conclusion, though this policy [ unclear]is not suitable for all students, I think anything that contributes to language learning should be encouraged.

Score: 50.8

Issues:

1. Restrict your essay to 280 – 320 words.

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Score: 61.6

Issues:

1. More than 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. More than 20% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

Score: 47.9

Issues:

1. Nearly 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. Convert passive sentences into their active counterparts.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

Score: 65.6

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

Score: 64.8

Issues:

1. More than 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. One paragraph contains more than 150 words. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.