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Issues:

1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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Score: ungraded

Issues:

1. 100% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. About 50% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
4. Numerous grammatical/logical problems.

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On hold [ need substantial improvement]

In the past, there are [ were ] limited work[job  ] choices, so workers [people  ]usually do[ did ] similar job [work  ]for[ throughout ] their lives.[ The whole sentence is irrelevant to the topic. ] However, [today, people have expanded professional options because….  ]more and more jobs requiring people to finish various tasks are available with the rapid development of different industries. It[ unclear pronoun ] leads to a debate that whether workers are more satisfied with the work of different tasks comprared with the work of similar tasks.[use your own language and your own ideas  ] However, it is hard to judge and based on the ages of workers.[irrelevant  ]

Yough workers are more satisfied about their work to finish various tasks for following reasons. First of all,  they can operate different programs in their work compared with past when workers do the same thing for a whole day. Repetition is what makes work dull easily, which drastically reduces satisfaction in work. What’s more, young workers are willing to learn different skills by working on various tasks everyday. For instance, thay can improve their organization skills when being asked to prepare for a significant event; Their communication skill will be improved when they have the chance to express our opinions in daily meetings. The achivement and progress inspire the young worker to work harder and gain more harvest, which absolutely makes them be more content with their work.

On the contary, old worker are more likely to be satisfied with work containing different tasks. It is hard for them to learn different skills required by the job. For example, my 40-years old aunt complained she was required to learn the using official applications, e.g. Powerpoint,Word, Excel. It was so hard that she was considering quitting the job. They prefer to work of  repition tasks which are easier to accomplish.

From what have been discussed, whether workers gain more satisfation from innovative or repetitive works depends on thrie ages and attitudes towards changing tasks.

Score: ungraded

Issues:

1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.

It is not uncommon to see roads filled with vehicles in modern society since cars have been playing a vital role in our daily commute. In that case, [ no logical connection with the prior sentence  ]some people anticipate that the number of cars will decline in the next two decades. In my perspective, however, the demand for vehicles will keep increasing regardless of other possible influences.

To begin with, technology has developed at a fast pace, making the upgrading of car industry feasible[ bad topic sentence/write a topic sentence that directly responds to your thesis., i.e. Depletion of fossil fuels may lead to a significant reduction of cars  ]. That means [  that ]traditional cars will probably be replaced by new energy [new-energy   ]cars in the near future[  this does not support car use will reduce ]. (Thus, lacking fossil fuels and gases can not result in the decrease of output of vehicles.)[ unclear  ] For instance, Tesla is [,   ]the leader of new energy vehicles, which substitutes petroleum for electricity. So, storage of conventional fuels can not confine the mass production of new energy cars, which suggests that the total amount of vehicles will not reduce, it’s just that the ratio of traditional cars to new energy vehicles changes.

Additionally, opponents who are against my point of view consider that many people nowadays are suffering from financial problems. They argue that it is more and more difficult to get a car since people’s money has been used to pay back debts. But fortunately, the government has made a statement on cutting down price of new energy cars in recent years. In order to advocate the use of renewable sources, governments published many policies, including providing special allowances for citizens.

Last but not least, there is an increasing demand for vehicles among young generations. Old vehicles can not satisfy their special taste. Young generations are looking for something which contains unique and fashionable elements. High-tech cars are just in line with the requirements. Admittedly, public transportation is becoming more convenient and effective than ever, which seems that there is no need for a private car. But in big cities, public transportation can often be crowded. People have to experience discomfort in relatively narrow space.

In summary, people’s enthusiasm about purchasing cars will by no means fade away in the future.

Score: 53.5

Should a governor [ wrong word/ it differs from a public official  ] act according to the highest ethical and moral norms all the time? From my point of view, (we should not always ask officials to do so. ) [ irrelevant/the focus is on words and acts of public officials; it has nothing to do with how you act.   ] This is because minor moral abnormalities are tolerable. Moreover, in some circumstances, maintaining the (highest standards) [ unclear  ] will [ grammatical error  ] conflict with people’s interests.

(Admittedly, some people may agree with this “issue” [ wrong word  ]unclear .) Sticking to the highest moral standards is beneficial to the public. [ factual error  ] Due to the authority of public figures, [ bad logical connection  ] they can function as moral models for citizens. Imagine that governors [ wrong word  ] maintain the standard norms in their behavior, such as not talking dirty or smoking in public. Then citizens are likely to behave similarly in the [article error   ] manner, (regulate their behaviors, and reach a higher moral level) [ unclear  ] . As a result, (asking for officials behaving civilized will benefit the whole society) [shift of emphasis   ] .

However, we cannot ask officials to act perfectly, because everyone has weaknesses. Small ethical or moral mistakes will not [ factual error  ] turn a great leader into a notorious one. Consider Napoleon, the celebrated revolutionist in France. His greed for pursuing power, a moral imperfection, did not limit [wrong verb   ] him to become an effective leader. Instead, it was his brevity and his significant contribution to France that impressed people. Consequently, it is reasonable not to expect governors to behave according to the highest norms. [ repetition  ]

Moreover, the highest standards sometimes contradict to [wrong preposition   ] most people’s interests. For example, at the highest ethical level, governors [  wrong word ] should forbid killing animals, since animals are our friends. But it is ridiculous if we human beings are not permitted to eat meat. Similarly, a leader may holds [grammatical error   ] that terrorists should not be condemned to death since everyone was born equal. [This [   unclear pronoun] seemly virtuous order will cause great disasters to society. ] [unclear   ] In these circumstances, keeping the [ article error  ] highest moral standards is detrimental to citizens. Hence, governors [ wrong word  ] should not be expected to do so.

To sum up, it is not required that( governors should maintain the best ethical and moral standards) [ repetition  ] , despite their positive influence on regulating people [word form error   ] behaviors. We can tolerate a great governor [ wrong word  ] to have small moral mistakes [repetition   ] . Whether or not keeping the highest standards also depends on (their parallelism with citizens’ interests) [ unclear  ] .

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